Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly and then add a clear supporting detail. Correct the vocabulary and grammar errors: say “a present bought by my parents,” “learned to ride it,” and avoid repeating “learned.” Use a linking word such as “I remember that” to make the answer more coherent. Keep the answer natural and within three or four sentences.

例: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. It was a present bought by my parents for my seventh birthday. I remember learning to ride it in the park near our house, and I went cycling there every afternoon.

提案: Give a clear opinion and support it with specific reasons and examples. Correct “by school” to “bicycles,” “my countries” to “my country,” “write them” to “ride them,” and “relax stress” to “relieve stress.” Improve the second sentence by using a natural structure such as “Many friends also go on bike rides together.” Use linking words like “because” and “In addition,” and mention specific places or situations.

例: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country because people use them to exercise and relieve stress after work or school. In addition, many friends go on bike rides together in parks or along rivers. Cycling is especially common at weekends when the weather is pleasant.

× It was a plane crash by my parents bought me for my 7th birthday.

✓ It was a present that my parents bought me for my seventh birthday.

The original sentence incorrectly combines a noun phrase with a relative clause. Use that to introduce the clause that explains which present it was. The repeated word learned in the following clause should also be removed.

× I learned learned to write it in the park near our house every afternoon.

✓ I learned to ride it in the park near our house every afternoon.

The verb learned is unnecessarily repeated, so it should appear only once. Ride is the correct verb for using a bicycle; write has a different meaning.

× Bikes are very popular in my countries.

✓ Bikes are very popular in my country.

Country refers to one nation in this context, so the singular form country is required. The plural form countries would mean more than one nation.

× Many people write them to relax stress after lessons or work.

✓ Many people ride them to relieve stress after lessons or work.

The sentence needs a verb that expresses using a bicycle, so ride is appropriate. The natural verb phrase is relieve stress, not relax stress.

× Friends often go for bike rides together in park or along rivers.

✓ Friends often go for bike rides together in the park or along rivers.

A singular countable noun such as park normally needs an article. Use the park when referring to a particular park or a known local park.

× Although cycling is common, social activities friends offer go for bike rides together in park or along rivers.

✓ Although cycling is common, it is also a social activity. Friends often go for bike rides together in the park or along rivers.

The original sentence incorrectly joins unrelated phrases and does not have a clear subject-verb structure. Divide it into two complete sentences and use friends as the subject of go.