Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the question directly and distinguish between a motorbike and a bicycle. Your response is too long and contains repeated or unclear phrases such as “I was not age less in age” and “the parents were not allowing me.” Use the past tense consistently, and organize your answer with a clear reason and one supporting detail. Avoid saying “drive a bike mode”; say “ride a motorbike” or “ride a bicycle.”

例: No, I didn’t have a motorbike because my parents thought I was too young to ride one, and I didn’t have a driving licence. However, I often rode a bicycle because it was a convenient way to get around my neighbourhood.

提案: Give a complete answer with a clear topic sentence and two well-connected reasons. The response ends unfinished and repeats “in my country.” Replace unclear expressions such as “a strong culture in clubs” and “a lot of transportation like buses and are not convenient” with specific explanations, such as motorcycle clubs, traffic congestion, or limited public transport. Use linking words like “also” and “because,” and make the comparison between bikes and buses grammatically complete.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country, especially among young people. Many people enjoy joining motorcycle clubs and saving money to buy a good bike. Also, bikes are convenient because they can move through traffic more easily than buses, so people can travel around the city quickly.

× when I was child

✓ when I was a child

The singular countable noun child needs the indefinite article a when referring to one child in a general past situation.

× the parents were not allowing me

✓ my parents did not allow me

The answer describes a completed situation in the past, so the simple past did not allow is more appropriate than the past continuous were not allowing. My is also more natural than the parents when referring to the speaker's parents.

× I was not enough to ride a bike because I was not age less in age

✓ I was too young to ride a motorbike

The original wording does not form a clear grammatical structure. Use too + adjective + to-infinitive to express that someone lacks the necessary age or ability.

× I was not having driving license

✓ I did not have a driving license

For possession in the past, use the simple past form did not have rather than the continuous form was not having.

× I was not having driving license

✓ I did not have a driving license

The singular countable noun license requires an article. A is used because the speaker is referring to one unspecified license.

× I usually ride bicycle

✓ I usually rode a bicycle

The question asks about the speaker's childhood, so the verb should be in the past tense: rode. The simple past is used for a repeated past habit in this context.

× I usually ride bicycle

✓ I usually rode a bicycle

The singular countable noun bicycle needs the indefinite article a.

× it is very convenient way for me to go

✓ it is a very convenient way for me to get around

The singular countable noun way requires the indefinite article a.

× many boys are dreaming of a good bike in future

✓ many young men dream of owning a good bike in the future

The simple present dream is more suitable for a general opinion or regular situation. The phrase in the future also requires the definite article the.

× many boys are dreaming of a good bike in future

✓ many young men dream of owning a good bike in the future

The fixed expression is in the future, so the definite article the is required.

× they usually spend the most of time

✓ they usually spend most of their time

When referring to the majority of someone's time, use most of their time, not the most of time. Their is needed to identify whose time is meant.

× spend the most of time on riding

✓ spend most of their time riding

After spend time, English normally uses the -ing form directly without the preposition on: spend time riding.

× it is very convenient way

✓ it is a very convenient way

The singular countable noun way requires the indefinite article a.

× because of a lot of transportation like buses

✓ because other forms of transportation, such as buses,

Transportation is generally an uncountable noun, and a lot of transportation is unnatural in this context. Other forms of transportation clearly expresses the intended comparison.

× because of a lot of transportation like buses and are not convenient

✓ because other forms of transportation, such as buses, are not convenient

The original clause has no clear subject before are. The noun phrase other forms of transportation supplies the subject and makes the clause grammatically complete.

× it is easy we can go anywhere by bike

✓ it is easy to go anywhere by bike

After It is easy, use the to-infinitive structure: it is easy to go. The original sentence incorrectly places a complete clause directly after easy.

× and it is very

✓ and it is very convenient

The original ending is incomplete because the adjective phrase is unfinished. A complete adjective, such as convenient, is needed to complete the meaning.