Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the question directly and use accurate past-tense expressions. “I died a biker” and “I told a bike” are not understandable; say “I owned a bike” and “I rode a bike.” Avoid the comma splice in the second sentence by separating the ideas or using a linking word such as “In fact.” You can also clarify what “junior” means by saying “when I was in junior high school.”

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I started riding one in junior high school, and I used it to commute to school every day when I was in high school. It was convenient because it helped me avoid traffic and save money on transportation.

提案: Give a clear opinion first, then support it with specific and grammatically accurate reasons. Replace “it's either road for bicycle” with “there are many bicycle lanes” or “there are dedicated roads for bicycles.” Use “several bikes” rather than “a several bikes,” and connect the ideas with “also” or “because” instead of beginning the final sentence with “And then.”

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. Many cities have dedicated bicycle lanes, and most families own at least one bike. They are especially common among students and commuters because cycling is inexpensive and convenient.

× Yes, in my country it's either road for bicycle and every family has a several bikes to ride.

✓ Yes, in my country, there are roads for bicycles, and every family has several bikes to ride.

The plural noun roads is needed because the sentence refers to roads in general. Bicycles is also more natural than the singular bicycle when speaking about bicycles generally. Use plural nouns after several.

× Yes, in my country it's either road for bicycle and every family has a several bikes to ride.

✓ Yes, in my country, there are roads for bicycles, and every family has several bikes to ride.

Use there are to introduce the existence of plural roads. The structure there are + plural noun is appropriate here. Also, either normally needs a matching or, so it is better to remove either in this sentence.

× Yes, in my country it's either road for bicycle and every family has a several bikes to ride.

✓ Yes, in my country, there are roads for bicycles, and every family has several bikes to ride.

A and several cannot be used together before the same noun. Use several bikes, not a several bikes. Several is already a quantifier that means more than two but not many.

× Yes, in my country it's either road for bicycle and every family has a several bikes to ride.

✓ Yes, in my country, there are roads for bicycles, and every family has several bikes to ride.

Either is normally paired with or, as in either roads or bike lanes. Since the sentence does not present two alternatives, either should be removed. Use and to connect the two related ideas.