Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ содержит прямой ответ, но есть повторение «I had a yes, I had» и несколько грамматических ошибок: правильно «a pink bike», «My mother gave me this bike». Используйте простую структуру: сначала ответьте на вопрос, затем добавьте одну конкретную деталь. Не нужно повторять одну и ту же информацию.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was pink, and my mother gave it to me as a birthday present. I loved riding it around my neighborhood after school.

提案: Ответ логичный и содержит причину, но в предложении есть грамматическая ошибка: правильно «because bigger cities have traffic jams» или «because there are traffic jams in bigger cities». Для большей естественности используйте связку «Moreover» или добавьте конкретный результат, например экономию времени и денег. Выражение «using bikes» можно заменить на более естественное «cycling» или «travelling by bike».

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in larger cities. This is because traffic jams are common, so cycling is often more convenient and cheaper than driving. It also helps people stay fit and reduces pollution.

× Yes, I had a yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The phrase “I had a yes” and the repeated clause make the sentence structurally incorrect. Remove the unnecessary repetition and start with a clear answer.

× I had a pink buy this bike.

✓ I had a pink bike.

The word “buy” does not fit grammatically in this sentence. To describe the bicycle, use the noun “bike” after the adjective “pink.”

× My mother give me this bike.

✓ My mother gave me this bike.

The question asks about a past experience, so the verb must be in the past tense. The past form of “give” is “gave.”

× because in bigger cities have traffic jams

✓ because there are traffic jams in bigger cities

When saying that something exists, English requires the “there is/there are” structure. Because “traffic jams” is plural, use “there are.”