Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer responds to the question, but it contains grammatical errors and an unclear time reference. Use the past tense consistently: “I didn’t have,” “I rode,” and “I fell.” Also, “I didn’t have a bike” conflicts with “I do have a bicycle,” so clarify that you own one now but did not own one as a child. Add one specific detail about the experience, and use a linking word such as “however” or “although.”

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. However, I sometimes borrowed one from a friend and rode it around my neighborhood. I fell off once, so I was a little nervous about cycling afterward.

提案: You give a clear opinion and a reason, but the answer is difficult to understand because of repetition, incorrect articles, subject–verb agreement, and awkward phrasing. Say “Bikes are very popular in my country” instead of “the bikes are very popular in our country,” and use “many people don’t have cars” rather than “everyone doesn’t have car.” Organize the response with a topic sentence, a reason, and a specific result or example. Avoid repeating “mostly,” “everyone,” and “one person.”

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country, especially in crowded cities. Many roads are narrow, and traffic is often heavy, so bicycles are a convenient and affordable way to travel. In fact, many families have at least one bike, and people often use them for short trips to work or the local shops.

× When I was a child I didn't have a bike, but I do have a bicycle.

✓ When I was a child, I didn't have a bike, but I did have a bicycle.

The question asks about the student's childhood, so the answer should use the past tense. Use did have instead of do have to describe possession in the past.

× I fall from the bicycle too.

✓ I fell off the bicycle, too.

The student is describing a past experience, so the past-tense form fell is required instead of the present-tense form fall.

× Yes, yeah, the bikes are very popular in our country.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in our country.

When speaking about bicycles in general, do not use the definite article the before the plural noun bikes.

× because mostly in our country the roads are very small

✓ because the roads in our country are mostly very narrow

The adverb mostly should be placed near the expression it modifies. Here, it modifies the description of the roads, so it is placed before the adjective.

× so everyone doesn't have car with them

✓ so not everyone has a car

Everyone doesn't have a car can suggest that nobody has a car. To express that some people have cars and some do not, use not everyone has a car. The article a is also needed before the singular countable noun car.

× everyone have bike

✓ everyone has a bike

Everyone is grammatically singular, so it takes has, not have. A singular countable noun also needs a determiner, so use a bike.

× mostly one home

✓ mostly in each home

The preposition in is needed to show that the bicycle is located in each home. However, a more natural expression for this meaning is per household.

× They do have bike for one person for.

✓ They usually have one bike per person.

The original sentence has an incomplete and repeated prepositional phrase. Use the complete structure one bike per person to express the intended relationship clearly.