Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the question directly and complete your final idea. Correct the grammar: say “When I was a child” instead of “When I was child,” “I didn’t have” instead of “I didn’t had,” and “we couldn’t afford one” instead of “they couldn’t buy me one.” Avoid fillers such as “uh” and the unnecessary repetition of “my family.” Add one specific detail about how you travelled or what you did instead of cycling.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. My family and I lived in a camp, and we couldn’t afford one at the time. Instead, I usually walked to school or played with other children near our home.

提案: Give a more natural and concise opening, such as “Yes, definitely, especially in rural areas.” Use the plural form “bikes” or “bicycles,” say “cycle to school every day” rather than “cycle everyday to the school with bike,” and avoid repeating the same idea. Support your opinion with a specific comparison between your village and larger cities, if appropriate.

例: Yes, definitely, especially in rural areas. In my village, many children cycle to school every day because it is convenient and inexpensive. Bikes are less common in larger cities, where people often rely on buses or motorcycles.

× When I was child, uh, actually I didn't had a bike because we used to live in a camp and my family, they couldn't buy me one also, uh, because we were not in a really good level of.

✓ When I was a child, uh, actually I didn't have a bike because we used to live in a camp and my family couldn't buy me one either because we were not financially well-off.

The singular countable noun child needs the indefinite article a. We say a child, not child, when referring to one child in general.

× When I was child, uh, actually I didn't had a bike because we used to live in a camp and my family, they couldn't buy me one also, uh, because we were not in a really good level of.

✓ When I was a child, uh, actually I didn't have a bike because we used to live in a camp and my family couldn't buy me one either because we were not financially well-off.

After the auxiliary did or didn't, the main verb must be in its base form. Therefore, didn't had is incorrect; didn't have is correct.

× When I was child, uh, actually I didn't had a bike because we used to live in a camp and my family, they couldn't buy me one also, uh, because we were not in a really good level of.

✓ When I was a child, uh, actually I didn't have a bike because we used to live in a camp and my family couldn't buy me one either because we were not financially well-off.

The noun phrase my family already functions as the subject, so the additional pronoun they is unnecessary in standard English. Use either my family or they, but not both together in this sentence.

× When I was child, uh, actually I didn't had a bike because we used to live in a camp and my family, they couldn't buy me one also, uh, because we were not in a really good level of.

✓ When I was a child, uh, actually I didn't have a bike because we used to live in a camp and my family couldn't buy me one either because we were not financially well-off.

The phrase not in a really good level of is incomplete because level of requires a following noun. Use a complete expression such as were not financially well-off or were not in a good financial situation.

× Absolutely. Uh, I do think that bicycle is, uh, popular in my country, especially because we, uh, love to, to cycle everyday to the school with bike and it's very common in my village.

✓ Absolutely. Uh, I do think that bicycles are popular in my country, especially because we love to cycle every day to school with a bike, and cycling is very common in my village.

When speaking about bicycles as a general category, use the plural noun bicycles and the plural verb are. A singular generic noun would require an article, as in a bicycle is.

× Absolutely. Uh, I do think that bicycle is, uh, popular in my country, especially because we, uh, love to, to cycle everyday to the school with bike and it's very common in my village.

✓ Absolutely. Uh, I do think that bicycles are popular in my country, especially because we love to cycle every day to school with a bike, and cycling is very common in my village.

Every day, meaning each day, is an adverbial phrase and must be written as two words. Everyday is an adjective, as in everyday activities.

× Absolutely. Uh, I do think that bicycle is, uh, popular in my country, especially because we, uh, love to, to cycle everyday to the school with bike and it's very common in my village.

✓ Absolutely. Uh, I do think that bicycles are popular in my country, especially because we love to cycle every day to school with a bike, and cycling is very common in my village.

When school refers to the normal activity of attending school, no definite article is used. Therefore, cycle to school is correct, not cycle to the school.

× Absolutely. Uh, I do think that bicycle is, uh, popular in my country, especially because we, uh, love to, to cycle everyday to the school with bike and it's very common in my village.

✓ Absolutely. Uh, I do think that bicycles are popular in my country, especially because we love to cycle every day to school with a bike, and cycling is very common in my village.

Bike is a singular countable noun, so it needs a determiner. Use a bike when referring to one unspecified bike.