Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答基本切题，也提供了自行车作为生日礼物以及父母教你骑车的细节。但时态错误较多：过去的经历应使用一般过去时，如“had”“was”“gave”“taught”，而不是现在时“have”“is”“am”“give”。此外，“it is my birthday gift”表达不自然，应改为“it was a birthday present”。可以删掉重复的“uh”，并用“because”或“and”自然连接细节。建议控制在2—3句，先直接回答，再补充时间和相关经历。

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My parents gave it to me as a birthday present when I was seven, and they taught me how to ride it. I really enjoyed riding it around my neighborhood.

提案: 回答观点明确，也结合广州的共享单车说明了自行车受欢迎的原因，内容比较具体。但“many shared bike”应改为“many shared bikes”，“avoid the traffic jam”更自然的表达是“avoid traffic jams”或“avoid getting stuck in traffic”。开头可以先直接回答“yes, they are quite popular”，再说明共享单车的便利性。建议使用“because”或“also”增强逻辑，并减少“uh”等口头停顿。

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in China, especially in large cities like Guangzhou. There are many shared bikes, so people can easily cycle short distances and avoid traffic jams. They are also affordable and convenient for commuting.

× Yes, I have a bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike.

问题发生在童年时期，所以应使用一般过去时。将现在时“have”改为过去时“had”。

× When I was a child, it is my birthday gift.

✓ When I was a child, it was my birthday gift.

句子描述的是过去的情况，因此系动词“is”应改为过去式“was”。

× When I am uh, seven years old, uh, my parents give it to me and told me how to ride a bike.

✓ When I was seven years old, my parents gave it to me and told me how to ride a bike.

“When I was seven years old”描述过去的年龄，应使用“was”而不是“am”。同时，主句中的“gave”和“told”都应使用一般过去时，保持时态一致。

× Yes, I'm now studying in Guangzhou and Guangzhou has many shared bike.

✓ Yes, I'm now studying in Guangzhou, and Guangzhou has many shared bikes.

“many”后面必须接可数名词的复数形式，因此“bike”应改为“bikes”。

× I can go uh, everywhere by bike and uh, it can uh, avoid the traffic jam.

✓ I can go everywhere by bike, and I can avoid traffic jams.

这里表达一般意义上的交通堵塞，应使用复数“traffic jams”。同时，使用“I can”使主语和前半句保持一致，表达也更自然。