Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly in the past tense because the question refers to your childhood. Avoid repeating words such as “when I.” You could add one specific detail, such as when you received the bike or how you used it, to make the answer more natural and complete.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My parents gave it to me when I was about eight years old, and I often rode it around my neighborhood with my friends.

提案: Begin with a clear answer and then give one logical reason or example. Use “bikes,” not unclear forms such as “buys” or “Bryce,” and avoid repeating “in my country.” The final part is difficult to understand, so organize your ideas with a linking word such as “because” and explain how people use bikes, for example, for commuting or exercise.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among students and people who commute to work. They are affordable and convenient, and they also help people avoid traffic. In addition, many people ride them for exercise.

× Yes, I have a bike when I when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

Because the question asks about a past time, use the simple past tense had instead of the present tense have. Also, remove the repeated phrase when I. A useful pattern is: I had [something] when I was a child.

× Buys are popular in my country and so many people in my country there want to have a good home. So Bryce is, uh, once.

✓ Bikes are popular in my country, and many people there want to have a good bike. So, bikes are widely used.

Use the plural noun bikes when speaking about bicycles in general. The word buys is not the correct noun here, and Bryce does not fit the meaning. Also, avoid repeating in my country; use there instead. Make sure the final sentence has a clear subject, verb, and meaning.

× Buys are popular in my country and so many people in my country there want to have a good home. So Bryce is, uh, once.

✓ Yes, I think so. Bikes are popular in my country, and many people there want to own a good bike.

The original response contains unclear and incomplete sentence structures, especially So Bryce is, uh, once. Use complete sentences with a clear subject and verb. A natural answer can be formed with this structure: Bikes are popular, and many people want to own one.