Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ недостаточно прямой и содержит много грамматических ошибок, повторов и неестественных выражений. Используйте прошедшее время: “I didn’t have”, “I used” и “I didn’t know”. Лучше сначала четко ответить на вопрос, а затем кратко объяснить причину и привести деталь. Фраза “one of the engaging experience” неестественна; можно сказать “a memorable experience”. Также избегайте противоречия между “I didn’t know how to ride” и упоминанием использования велосипеда без пояснения.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because I didn’t know how to ride one. However, I sometimes borrowed my friends’ bikes, since we lived quite close to each other. It was a memorable experience, although I still can’t ride very well today.

提案: Ответ в целом соответствует вопросу и содержит причины, но есть ошибки в грамматике, выборе слов и структуре. Начните с четкого утверждения: “Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country.” Используйте “a cheap form of transport” вместо “popular trends like vehicle” и “convenient” вместо “one of the convenience one”. Свяжите причины логично: низкая стоимость, польза для здоровья и солнечная погода. Уберите слова-паразиты и незаконченные фразы; достаточно 3–4 четких предложений.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. They are an affordable and convenient form of transport, especially for short journeys. In addition, many people ride them in parks because cycling is good for their health. The sunny weather also makes cycling more enjoyable.

× I don't have a bike when I was a child.

✓ I didn't have a bike when I was a child.

The phrase when I was a child refers to a finished time in the past, so the past-tense form didn't have is required.

× because I didn't even know how to ride it so but I used my friends' bike

✓ because I didn't even know how to ride it, so I used my friend's bike

So and but should not be used together here because they express different relationships. Use so to show the result. Also, friend's is the singular possessive form.

× it was one of the engaging experience that I've ever had

✓ it was one of the most engaging experiences that I've ever had

After one of the, the noun must be plural because the phrase refers to one member of a group. Therefore, experience must become experiences.

× it was one of the engaging experiences that I've ever had

✓ it was one of the most engaging experiences that I've ever had

The structure one of the ... requires a superlative adjective, such as most engaging, because the experience is being compared with all the speaker's other experiences.

× Nowadays I didn't even know how to ride the bike

✓ Nowadays, I don't even know how to ride a bike

Nowadays refers to the present, so the present tense don't know is needed instead of the past form didn't know.

× but I don't even have a problem with

✓ but I don't have a problem with that

The preposition with needs an object. Adding that completes the sentence and refers back to not knowing how to ride a bike.

× I think bikes and one of the most popular trends

✓ I think bikes are one of the most popular types of vehicles

The plural subject bikes requires the plural verb are, not and. The corrected structure also makes the comparison grammatically complete.

× one of the most popular trends like vehicle in our country

✓ one of the most popular types of vehicles in our country

After types of, the noun must be plural, so vehicle must become vehicles. This form correctly refers to bikes as a category of transportation.

× there's also a lot of bikes in the parks

✓ there are also a lot of bikes in the parks

The noun bikes is plural, so the there-be structure must use are rather than the singular form is.

× because it really can be very helpful for your health

✓ because they can be very helpful for your health

The pronoun it is singular, but it refers to bikes, which is plural. Therefore, the plural pronoun they is required.

× it is one of the convenience one

✓ it is one of the most convenient ones

The phrase one of the requires a superlative form, so convenience must be changed to the adjective convenient and modified with most.

× it is one of the convenience one

✓ it is one of the most convenient ones

One refers to a single item, but after one of the, the noun must refer to several items. Therefore, one must become the plural form ones.

× but uh, in because you know, country, there is a lot of sunny days

✓ Also, because my country has a lot of sunny days, cycling is convenient there.

The original clause contains unnecessary and incorrectly combined connectors and lacks a clear sentence structure. Use one clear reason clause beginning with because and complete it with a main clause.

× you know, country

✓ my country

Country needs a determiner in this context. My country clearly identifies the country being discussed and avoids an incomplete noun phrase.

× there is a lot of sunny days

✓ there are a lot of sunny days

Sunny days is a plural noun phrase, so the correct there-be form is there are, not there is.