Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ достаточно подробный и содержит описание велосипеда и пример его использования. Однако первое предложение представляет собой длинную цепочку без правильной пунктуации и связок. Кроме того, «I left it» не соответствует смыслу; вероятно, вы хотели сказать «I loved it». Используйте «lights» или «decorative lights» вместо «flashlights», а «to meet my friends» вместо «meet with my friends». Разделите ответ на 3 коротких предложения и добавьте более естественные связки, например «because» и «so».

例: Yes, I had a beautiful bike when I was younger. It was bright blue, covered in colourful stickers, and had decorative lights, so it looked very special. I loved riding it to the park every afternoon to meet my friends.

提案: Ответ хорошо организован: вы сразу выражаете мнение, называете причины и приводите примеры. Лексика уместная, но «fight planes» — ошибка; правильное выражение — «bike lanes» или «cycling lanes». Также естественнее сказать «have changed their lifestyles» или «have adopted healthier lifestyles». Для более точного и естественного ответа можно добавить связку «As a result» перед заключительной деталью и использовать «on weekends» или «at weekends» последовательно.

例: Yes, bikes have become much more popular in my country in recent years. Many people have adopted healthier lifestyles, and they cycle to improve their fitness and save money on transport. For example, families often ride in parks at weekends, while commuters use bicycles because there are more bike lanes now.

× Yeah, I had a really beautiful bike when I was much younger it was bright blue and decorated with colourful stickers and had flashlights.

✓ Yeah, I had a really beautiful bike when I was much younger. It was bright blue, decorated with colourful stickers, and had flashlights.

Two independent clauses were joined without appropriate punctuation, creating a run-on sentence. Separate them with a full stop. Commas also make the coordinated descriptions easier to read.

× I left it because it looked special so I rode it to the park every afternoon meet with my friends.

✓ I left it because it looked special, so I rode it to the park every afternoon to meet my friends.

The phrase 'meet with my friends' needs the infinitive marker 'to' after 'every afternoon' to express purpose: 'to meet my friends.' A comma should be placed before 'so' because it joins two independent clauses.

× Yeah, I think they have become much more popular in recent years because many people changed their lifestyle and started cycling for health and to save money.

✓ Yeah, I think they have become much more popular in recent years because many people have changed their lifestyles and started cycling for their health and to save money.

The time expression 'in recent years' refers to a period continuing up to the present, so the present perfect 'have changed' is more appropriate than the simple past 'changed.' The plural form 'lifestyles' is suitable because 'many people' usually refers to different individuals with potentially different lifestyles. 'For their health' is also more natural when referring to many people.