Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly and avoid repetition, fillers, and the unnecessary phrase “Thank you.” Use a more natural expression than “my parents provided it to me,” such as “my parents bought it for me.” Also, explain specifically why the bike was meaningful instead of saying it was a “beautiful example,” which is unclear in this context. Use linking words such as “because” or “so” to connect your details.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My parents bought it for me when I was about eight, and I used to ride it around my neighborhood every afternoon. It was a great way to have fun and spend time outdoors.

提案: State your main idea naturally and avoid repeating “bikes.” Correct the grammar in “it mainly used” and “for reaching here and their destinations”; use “they are mainly used for convenience and to save time” and “getting from place to place.” Replace the unnatural phrase “the dream of every age group of the people” with a specific explanation, such as their affordability or convenience. Include one concrete example and use a linking word to make the answer more coherent.

例: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country, especially among students and people who live in crowded cities. They are affordable, convenient, and environmentally friendly, so many people use them to travel short distances and avoid traffic. However, motorcycles are more common for longer journeys.

× Yes, I had a bike when I, I was a child and my parents provided it to me and I rode every afternoon in my neighborhood and it was very, uh, beautiful example for me. Thank you.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My parents provided it for me, and I rode it every afternoon in my neighborhood. It was a beautiful experience for me.

The singular countable noun example requires the indefinite article a. The phrase a beautiful experience is more grammatically appropriate and natural in this context. The repeated I was removed because it is a speech repetition, not a necessary part of the sentence.

× Yes, bikes are popular in my country because bikes are the dream of every age group of the people and it mainly used for the comfortability and to save the time.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in my country because bikes are popular with people of all age groups, and they are mainly used for convenience and to save time.

The verb used is in the passive voice, so it needs the auxiliary verb are because bikes is plural. The pronoun it is also incorrect because it refers to the plural noun bikes; use they instead. In addition, save time is the standard expression without the.

× Yes, bikes are popular in my country because bikes are the dream of every age group of the people and it mainly used for the comfortability and to save the time.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in my country because bikes are popular with people of all age groups, and they are mainly used for convenience and to save time.

The pronoun must agree with its antecedent. Bikes is plural, so the correct pronoun is they, not it. Use plural pronouns when referring to plural nouns.

× Yes, bikes are popular in my country because bikes are the dream of every age group of the people and it mainly used for the comfortability and to save the time.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in my country because bikes are popular with people of all age groups, and they are mainly used for convenience and to save time.

The expression save time is a general expression, so it does not require the definite article the. Also, people of all age groups is the natural general expression; the people is unnecessary here.

× That's why everyone prefers the bike for the for reaching here and their destinations.

✓ That is why everyone prefers bikes for reaching their destinations.

The phrase for the for reaching contains duplicated and incorrectly ordered words. Use either for reaching or to reach, but not both. The corrected sentence uses for reaching their destinations, which forms a clear and grammatical structure.