Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and directly answers the question, and you include specific details about the bike and when you received it. However, “it was presented to me by my parent” sounds unnatural; say “my parents gave it to me.” Also, avoid repeating “I love it” and use the past tense consistently because you are describing your childhood. You could add one specific detail about how you used the bike.

例: Yes, I did. My parents gave me a pink bike for my sixth birthday, and I was absolutely thrilled because pink was my favorite color at the time. I used to ride it around my neighborhood every afternoon, so it became one of my favorite childhood possessions.

提案: You answer the question directly and provide an example from your neighborhood, but there are several grammar and fluency problems. Use the plural form “bikes are” rather than “bike is,” and avoid repeating “almost every day” and “they.” Keep the tense consistent by saying “come out” and “ride their bikes.” You could also explain why bikes are popular, such as because they are affordable, convenient, and enjoyable.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among children and teenagers. Most of the kids in my neighborhood own one, and they often ride their bikes together after school. I think bikes are popular because they are affordable, convenient, and a fun way to exercise.

× It was a pink bike and it was presented to me by my parent on my 6th birthday.

✓ It was a pink bike, and it was presented to me by my parents on my 6th birthday.

Parents is plural because a child normally receives a gift from both parents. Use the plural noun parents when referring to a person's mother and father together.

× Bike is quite popular in my country.

✓ Bikes are quite popular in my country.

Bikes is a plural countable noun used to talk about bicycles in general, so it needs the plural verb are. The singular form bike would need an article, as in A bike is quite popular.

× Most of the kids in my neighborhood own a bike and almost every day they came out they they almost everyday they come out, they ride their bike, making noise, having fun just the way kids do.

✓ Most of the kids in my neighborhood own a bike, and almost every day, when they come outside, they ride their bikes, make noise, and have fun, just as kids do.

The question asks about a general situation, so use the present tense come, ride, make, and have instead of the past-tense form came. The repeated words have also been removed to make the sentence grammatically clear.

× Most of the kids in my neighborhood own a bike and almost every day they came out they they almost everyday they come out, they ride their bike, making noise, having fun just the way kids do.

✓ Most of the kids in my neighborhood own a bike, and almost every day, when they come outside, they ride their bikes, make noise, and have fun, just as kids do.

Because they refers to multiple children, the noun should be plural: their bikes. Use the plural form when each child may have a bike and the statement refers to the group generally.

× Most of the kids in my neighborhood own a bike and almost every day they came out they they almost everyday they come out, they ride their bike, making noise, having fun just the way kids do.

✓ Most of the kids in my neighborhood own a bike, and almost every day, when they come outside, they ride their bikes, make noise, and have fun, just as kids do.

Every day, written as two words, is an adverbial phrase meaning each day. Everyday, written as one word, is an adjective, as in everyday activities.