Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the question directly with “Yes, I did,” and avoid fillers such as “uh.” Use the past tense consistently: “got” instead of “get.” The phrase “a present on my birthday” is more natural than “a present, on my birthday for me.” Finish the final idea clearly by saying what you wanted to learn to do. Add one specific detail about the bike or how you learned to ride it.

例: Yes, I did. My dad gave me a blue bike for my birthday, and I was really excited because I had always wanted one. I practiced riding it in our neighborhood every afternoon until I could ride confidently.

提案: Give a complete answer and avoid ending with “and I.” The expression “go out just for a wind” is unnatural; say “go out for some fresh air” or “go for a walk.” Use a clearer structure with a topic sentence, a reason, and a specific example. You could also mention where people ride bikes or why cycling is popular, such as exercise, commuting, or convenience.

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country. For example, when I go out for some fresh air in the evening, I often see several people cycling in the park or along the main roads. Many people ride bikes because cycling is convenient and helps them stay healthy.

× I was really happy, uh, when I get it

✓ I was really happy when I got it.

The verb get should be in the past tense because the speaker is describing a past event. Use got, not get, after when in this sentence.

× I really wanted to learn to.

✓ I really wanted to learn to ride it.

The phrase learn to is incomplete because the verb learn to normally needs a base verb after to. Add ride it to complete the meaning.

× Every evening when I go out just for a wind

✓ Every evening when I go out just to get some fresh air

For a wind is not a natural English expression for this meaning. Use to get some fresh air to explain the purpose of going outside.

× I see at least 2 or even 4 people riding bikes and I.

✓ I see at least two or even four people riding bikes.

The ending and I is an incomplete phrase and does not add any meaning. Remove it so that the sentence ends with a complete clause.