Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the question directly without saying “Hello.” Avoid repeating “because” and “I don’t like it.” Also, “being a girl” does not logically explain why you did not have a bike, and “my father seem don't have any cars” is grammatically incorrect and unclear. Use a simple structure: give your answer, provide one reason, and add a specific detail if possible. Use the past tense correctly, such as “I didn’t have” and “my father didn’t own.”

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. I wasn’t very interested in cycling, and my father didn’t own a car, so we usually walked or used public transportation. As a result, I never learned how to ride a bike properly.

提案: Give a complete answer and avoid repetition, such as “every people People in in.” Use “many people” or “most children” instead of “every people.” The answer should include a clear reason and, ideally, a specific example of how bikes are used in your country. Finish your sentence instead of stopping at “when they.”

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among children and young adults. Many people learn to ride when they are young because bikes are affordable and convenient for short journeys. In addition, some people use them to exercise or commute to work.

× Hello no because I'm a girl and I don't like it and my father seem don't have any cars or something to drive so I don't like bikes and.

✓ No, I did not have a bike when I was a child because I did not like bikes, and my father seemed not to have a car or anything to drive me in.

The question asks about a past situation in childhood, so the main verbs should be in the past tense: did not have, was, did not like, and seemed. Using the past tense consistently makes the time reference clear.

× I don't like it

✓ I did not like them.

The pronoun it is singular, but it refers to bikes, which is plural. Use them for a plural noun. Because the answer refers to childhood, did not like is also more appropriate than do not like.

× my father seem

✓ my father seemed

The subject my father is third-person singular, so the verb must have a singular form. Since the answer refers to the past, seem changes to seemed. Remember to use a singular verb with he, she, it, or a singular noun.

× Hello no because I'm a girl and I don't like it and my father seem don't have any cars or something to drive so I don't like bikes and.

✓ No, I did not have a bike when I was a child. I did not like bikes, and my father seemed not to have a car or anything to drive me in.

The original answer is a run-on sentence and ends with an incomplete phrase. Divide the ideas into complete sentences, and make sure each sentence has a clear subject and verb. Avoid ending with and when no additional idea follows.

× because every people

✓ because everyone

Every cannot be used directly before the uncountable noun people in this way. Use everyone when referring to all people as individuals, or use all people when referring to the group. Everyone takes a singular verb, such as had.

× People in in their childhood

✓ People in their childhood

The preposition in is repeated unnecessarily. Use it only once: people in their childhood. A more natural alternative is during their childhood.

× they loved it

✓ they loved them

The pronoun it is singular, but it refers to bikes, which is plural. Therefore, use the plural pronoun them. You can also avoid this issue by using a singular noun phrase: everyone had a bike and loved it.

× Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because every people People in in their childhood had bikes and they loved it when they

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because everyone had a bike during childhood and loved it.

The original response contains repeated words and ends with the incomplete phrase when they. A complete sentence should not end with a dependent clause unless another clause follows. Remove the repetition and finish the idea with a complete statement.