Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the question directly and use consistent past tense. Avoid repeating “when I was young” and remove unclear phrases such as “it was the right one.” Add one specific detail about where you rode the bike or how you felt. Use linking words such as “especially” or “because” to connect your ideas naturally.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I often rode it around my neighborhood with my friends, especially at weekends. I really enjoyed it because it was a fun way to spend time outdoors.

提案: Your answer gives relevant reasons and a personal example, but it is one long sentence with repeated ideas. Use more natural phrases such as “get to work or school” instead of “reach at work or school,” and use “them” to refer to bikes. Organize the response with clear linking words, such as “For example,” “while,” and “Personally.”

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. Many people use them to get to work or school because they are affordable and convenient. Personally, I sometimes ride a bike because it is a quick way to travel, especially when the roads are busy.

× Like I like when I ride a bike with my friends when I was young, it was the right one.

✓ I liked riding a bike with my friends when I was young. It was the right one.

The speaker is describing a past experience, so like should be changed to the past-tense form liked. Avoid repeating the filler Like at the beginning because it makes the sentence less clear.

× Like I like when I ride a bike with my friends when I was young, it was the right one.

✓ I liked riding a bike with my friends when I was young. It was the right one.

The verb like is normally followed by a gerund, or verb ending in -ing, when describing an activity. Therefore, liked riding is more grammatically appropriate than like when I ride in this sentence.

× Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because for example some people use it to reach at work or school while some people use it because it's fast and cheap but for me I use it because it's cheap and quick.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because, for example, some people use them to reach work or school, while some people use them because they are fast and cheap. For me, I use them because they are cheap and quick.

The verb reach does not take the preposition at before a destination. Say reach work or school, not reach at work or school. The phrase for example should also be separated with commas for clarity.

× Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because for example some people use it to reach at work or school while some people use it because it's fast and cheap but for me I use it because it's cheap and quick.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because, for example, some people use them to reach work or school, while some people use them because they are fast and cheap. For me, I use them because they are cheap and quick.

Bikes is plural, so it and its related pronoun forms should be replaced with them and they. Use them when bikes are the object of use, and use they when bikes are the subject of are fast, cheap, or quick.