Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer more directly and use the correct preposition and verb form. Say “I got it for my birthday” rather than “I had in my birthday.” You should also remove the hesitation “umm” and add one specific detail about the bike or how you used it to make your answer more complete.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My father bought it for my birthday, and I used to ride it around my neighborhood with my friends. It was a simple blue bike, but I really enjoyed riding it.

提案: State your opinion clearly and avoid repetition, such as “popular popular” and “kind of.” Use accurate expressions like “Motorbikes are very popular in Vietnam” and “people prefer using bikes.” Also, distinguish between bicycles and motorbikes, and explain your reasons logically with linking words such as “because” and “as a result.”

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in Vietnam, especially motorbikes. Many people use them because they are convenient and affordable in busy cities. In addition, some people ride bicycles to stay healthy and avoid traffic jams.

× Yes, I had umm in my birthday.

✓ Yes, I had a bike on my birthday.

Use on with specific days and dates, such as on my birthday. The preposition in is not appropriate here.

× I will say yes, because Vietnam is kind of very popular popular by using a motorbike and bike.

✓ I would say yes because motorbikes and bicycles are very popular in Vietnam.

The original sentence has an incorrect structure because Vietnam is presented as the thing that is popular by using vehicles. Make motorbikes and bicycles the subject and use the phrase popular in Vietnam. Avoid repeating popular.

× We prefer use a bike to get healthy and also like the traffic.

✓ We prefer using a bike to get healthy and also like the traffic.

Prefer can be followed by a gerund, so use should become using. You can also say prefer to use, but prefer using is a natural alternative.