Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the question directly with a clear topic sentence, such as “Yes, I did.” Avoid confusing phrases like “when I was late” and “I would think Rudy,” which make your meaning unclear. Explain how you used the bicycle and give one specific example. Also, do not include the incomplete fragment “One weekend.”

例: Yes, I did. I had a bicycle when I was a child, and it was very useful because I could ride it to my friends’ houses after school. I also used it to go to the park at weekends.

提案: Give a direct answer first and avoid using both “As I think” and “because” together. Use the plural form “bikes” or specify “motorcycles,” since “bike” can refer to either type. Support your opinion with a clear reason and, if possible, a comparison or specific example.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in India, especially among young people. Many people use motorcycles because they are cheaper and easier to ride through busy streets than cars. Bicycles are also common for short journeys and exercise.

× As I had a bicycle when I was late, it was very helpful because I would think Rudy to visit my friends after school and to go to the park.

✓ Yes, I had a bicycle when I was little. It was helpful because I could ride it to visit my friends after school and go to the park.

The original sentence has an unclear and incorrectly connected structure. As and because are used together unnecessarily, and would think Rudy does not form a grammatical expression. Use separate sentences and a clear verb phrase such as could ride it. Also, when I was little is the appropriate expression for talking about childhood.

× One weekend.

✓ I often rode it to the park on weekends.

One weekend is only a sentence fragment because it does not contain a subject and a verb. A complete sentence needs at least a subject and a verb. For example, I often rode it to the park on weekends is a complete idea.

× As I think because most of the people in India use bike more than other cars, especially young boys.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because most people in India use them more than cars, especially young boys.

As and because should not be used together to introduce the same reason. Use one conjunction. In this sentence, because clearly introduces the reason for the speaker's opinion.

× As I think because most of the people in India use bike more than other cars, especially young boys.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because most people in India use them more than cars, especially young boys.

Bike is a singular countable noun, but the sentence describes bicycles in general. Therefore, use the plural form bikes. The pronoun them also correctly refers back to the plural noun bikes.