Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and directly answers the question, with a relevant explanation about your fear and your father's encouragement. However, “'cause” is informal, “scaredy cat” is slightly childish for the IELTS test, and the contrast with “But” could be smoother. You could also avoid repeating “when I was a child/young” and explain whether you eventually learned to ride.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, although I was initially too afraid to ride it. I was quite timid at that age, but my father encouraged me to practise. Eventually, I learned to ride and became much more confident.

提案: You answer the question directly and provide specific examples, such as your father cycling with friends and seeing cyclists on the roads. However, “really” is repeated, “a sort of sort of sport” is redundant, and “my dad always bikes” would sound more natural as “my dad often goes cycling.” Use a clearer linking phrase and explain why cycling is popular, such as its health benefits or convenience. The final sentence could also be phrased more naturally as “when I drive to the capital or a shopping mall.”

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because cycling is considered a healthy and enjoyable activity. For example, my father often goes cycling with his friends around our town at weekends. I also see many people riding bikes when I drive to the capital or a nearby shopping mall.