Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the question directly and use consistent past tense because you are talking about your childhood. Correct “which I go” to “which I used to ride,” “in the weekends” to “on weekends,” and “go longer rides” to “go on longer rides.” Avoid repeating “short rides,” and use linking words such as “Usually” and “However” to organize your ideas. Keep the answer to three or four clear sentences.

例: Yes, I had my own bike when I was a child. I usually rode it around my hometown after school, and I sometimes went on longer rides with my friends at the weekends. It was a great way to have fun and stay active.

提案: Give a clear opinion first, then support it with a specific reason or example. Replace “very much popular” with “very popular,” and “young children” with “children” or “young people,” depending on your meaning. The second sentence is unclear: explain that cycling helps people escape their busy lifestyles, for example. Use a linking word such as “Moreover” or “This is because” to make the answer more coherent.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country, especially among children and teenagers. This is because cycling is an affordable way to exercise and relax after a busy day. Moreover, many people use bikes for short trips because they can avoid traffic.

× I had my own bike which I go for short rides.

✓ I had my own bike, on which I went for short rides.

The answer describes childhood experiences in the past, so go must be changed to the past-tense form went.

× I had my own bike which I go for short rides.

✓ I had my own bike, on which I went for short rides.

The preposition on is needed before which to show that the speaker went on the bike.

× In the weekends, I usually go longer rides as well.

✓ On weekends, I usually go on longer rides as well.

We normally say on weekends, not in the weekends. We also say go on a ride or go on rides.

× In the weekends, I usually go longer rides as well.

✓ On weekends, I usually went on longer rides as well.

Because the speaker is describing childhood habits, the present-tense verb go should be changed to the past-tense form went.

× Bikes are very much popular in my country.

✓ Bikes are very popular in my country.

Popular is an adjective that is normally modified by very, not very much.

× Bikes are very much popular in my country especially among the young children.

✓ Bikes are very popular in my country, especially among young children.

When referring to young children in general, the definite article the is unnecessary. The is used when referring to a specific group of children.

× People usually like to go on bike rides whenever they get time that will be greatly from by their hustle and busy life.

✓ People usually like to go on bike rides whenever they have time because bike rides help them get away from their hectic, busy lives.

The sentence expresses a general fact, so the future form will be is not appropriate. Use the present tense help instead.

× People usually like to go on bike rides whenever they get time that will be greatly from by their hustle and busy life.

✓ People usually like to go on bike rides whenever they have time because bike rides help them get away from their hectic, busy lives.

The original sentence contains the incomplete and unclear phrase will be greatly from by. Use the complete structure help someone get away from something to express the intended meaning clearly.