Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 「Yes, I did.」と直接答えられており、具体的な年齢も述べているため、基本構成はできています。ただし、「I was I was」は言い間違いなので、「when I was five years old」と一度だけ言いましょう。また、Part 1では、購入後にどのように使ったかなどの具体的な補足を1文加えると、より自然で効果的な回答になります。

例: Yes, I did. My father bought me a bike when I was five years old. I used to ride it around my neighborhood with my friends.

提案: 「Yes, I do.」と意見を明確に述べていますが、「I guess the bicycles」はこの文脈では不自然なので、「bikes are popular」と言いましょう。また、「where I was grown up in Kyoto」は文法的に誤っているため、「I grew up in Kyoto」または「In Kyoto, where I grew up」と表現します。理由を明確にするために、「because」や「also」を使い、便利さや環境などの具体的な理由を1～2文加えましょう。不要な「uh」や同じ内容の繰り返しも減らすと、より流暢で効果的になります。

例: Yes, I do. Bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in Kyoto, where I grew up. Many people ride them because they are convenient and environmentally friendly. They are also useful for getting around narrow streets and avoiding traffic.

× My father bought me a bike when I was I was five years old.

✓ My father bought me a bike when I was five years old.

The subject and verb phrase “I was” are repeated. Use the phrase only once to form a grammatically correct time clause. When speaking, pause briefly before continuing instead of repeating the subject and verb.

× I guess the bicycles are popular in my country.

✓ I guess bicycles are popular in my country.

The sentence refers to bicycles in general, so no definite article is needed. Use “bicycles” rather than “the bicycles” when making a general statement about a category of things.

× This is because, uh, where I was grown up in Kyoto.

✓ This is because I grew up in Kyoto.

“Grow up” is normally used as an active intransitive verb, so it should not be expressed in the passive form “was grown up.” Use the past-tense form “grew up” to describe where you spent your childhood.

× This is because, uh, where I was grown up in Kyoto.

✓ This is because I grew up in Kyoto.

The original sentence contains an incomplete clause after “because.” A complete clause needs a subject and a verb. “I grew up in Kyoto” is a complete and natural explanation.