Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Use the past tense consistently because the question refers to your childhood: say “I had” instead of “I do have.” Also, replace the unnatural phrase “that time” with “back then” or “when I was younger.” Avoid fillers such as “uh,” and add one specific detail about where or how often you cycled. A clear topic sentence followed by one supporting detail would make the answer more natural and effective.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, and I often rode it around my neighborhood after school. I especially enjoyed cycling with my friends on weekends.

提案: Answer the question directly with a natural phrase such as “Bikes are not particularly popular.” The expression “it is densely populated where” is grammatically awkward, and “accessible to most of the places” should be changed to “practical in many areas” or “easy to use in most places.” Use a linking word such as “because” to introduce a clear reason, and add a specific consequence or comparison to develop your answer.

例: I don’t think bikes are particularly popular in my country. Many cities are densely populated and have heavy traffic, so cycling can be dangerous and inconvenient. As a result, most people prefer to use public transportation or motorcycles.

× Yes, I do have a bike when I was a child and I frequently, uh, went cycling that time.

✓ Yes, I did have a bike when I was a child, and I frequently went cycling at that time.

The phrase when I was a child refers to a completed period in the past, so use the past auxiliary did instead of the present auxiliary do. Also, the standard preposition in the expression is at that time, not that time.

× I think bikes are not that popular in our country because it is densely populated where bikes are not really accessible to most of the places.

✓ I think bikes are not that popular in our country because it is densely populated and bikes are not really accessible in most places.

Use in, rather than to, with places when describing where something is accessible. The natural expression is accessible in most places.

× I think bikes are not that popular in our country because it is densely populated where bikes are not really accessible to most of the places.

✓ I think bikes are not that popular in our country because it is densely populated and bikes are not really accessible in most places.

Where is not an appropriate conjunction here because the second clause does not describe a location. Use and to connect the two reasons: the country is densely populated, and bikes are not accessible in most places.