Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer more directly and avoid hesitation fillers such as “uh.” Use the past tense consistently and improve the noun phrase: say “I had a red bike” rather than “I had the red bike.” You could add one specific detail about how or where you used it, linked with “because” or “so.”

例: Yes, I had a red bike when I was a child. It was one of my favorite possessions because I used to ride it around my neighborhood with my friends. I was very proud of it because it was my first bike.

提案: Begin with a clear topic sentence, such as “Yes, bikes are very popular in my country.” Correct the grammar and word choice: use “bikes are,” “a means of transportation,” and “a form of exercise.” Avoid the repetitive list “among young and old people, among boy and girl,” and finish with one or two specific reasons, using a linking word such as “because” or “also.”

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among young people. Many people use them as a convenient means of transportation, while others ride them for exercise. In addition, cycling is becoming more common because it is affordable and environmentally friendly.

× Yes, I had uh, when I was a child, I had the red bike and it was actually one of my favorite uh, things that I've ever had.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, I had a red bike, and it was actually one of my favorite things that I've ever had.

Use a before red bike because the bike is being mentioned for the first time and is not a specific bike previously identified. The repeated words and fillers were removed to make the sentence grammatically complete and natural.

× Yes it does bike is one of the most popular things and devices to move from one place to another or use it as a exercise tools among young and old people, among boy and girl and. Uh.

✓ Yes, bikes are one of the most popular ways to travel from one place to another, and they are used as exercise tools by young and old people, including boys and girls.

It does cannot refer correctly to bikes in this answer. Use bikes as the subject and they when referring back to bikes. Also, use they are used to maintain a clear grammatical structure instead of the unclear phrase use it.

× Yes it does bike is one of the most popular things and devices to move from one place to another or use it as a exercise tools among young and old people, among boy and girl and. Uh.

✓ Yes, bikes are one of the most popular ways to travel from one place to another, and they are used as exercise tools by young and old people, including boys and girls.

Bikes should be plural because the answer discusses bicycles generally. Exercise tools should also be plural, and boy and girl should be changed to boys and girls because the answer refers to people in general.

× Yes it does bike is one of the most popular things and devices to move from one place to another or use it as a exercise tools among young and old people, among boy and girl and. Uh.

✓ Yes, bikes are one of the most popular ways to travel from one place to another, and they are used as exercise tools by young and old people, including boys and girls.

The plural subject bikes requires the plural verb are, not is. In the second clause, the plural pronoun they also requires are used.

× Yes it does bike is one of the most popular things and devices to move from one place to another or use it as a exercise tools among young and old people, among boy and girl and. Uh.

✓ Yes, bikes are one of the most popular ways to travel from one place to another, and they are used as exercise tools by young and old people, including boys and girls.

The phrase a exercise tools is incorrect because a is used before a singular noun beginning with a consonant sound, while exercise begins with a vowel sound. The corrected phrase is exercise tools because the plural noun is being used generally. When using a singular noun, the correct form would be an exercise tool.

× Yes it does bike is one of the most popular things and devices to move from one place to another or use it as a exercise tools among young and old people, among boy and girl and. Uh.

✓ Yes, bikes are one of the most popular ways to travel from one place to another, and they are used as exercise tools by young and old people, including boys and girls.

The original sentence combines several incomplete and disconnected phrases. Use a clear subject and verb in each clause, and connect the two main ideas with and. This creates a complete sentence that directly answers whether bikes are popular.