Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答有直接回应“没有”，并尝试补充居住环境和父母没有买自行车的原因，但存在较多语法、词汇和表达问题。应说“in the countryside”，而不是“in a countryside”；“there are there”时态和含义不清；“write a bag”应为“ride a bike”。另外，内容可以按照“直接回答—原因—具体解释”的顺序组织，并使用 because 或 so 连接信息。注意避免重复表达，如“a lot loads”。

例: No, I didn’t. I grew up in the countryside, where there were very few paved roads, so it wasn’t convenient or safe for me to ride a bike. Besides, my parents didn’t think I really needed one.

提案: 回答观点明确，也提到了学生骑车和共享单车，内容方向较好。但“popular in school students”应改为“popular among school students”，“They almost got one bike”表达不自然，应改为“Most of them own a bike”或“Many of them have access to a bike”；“ride for their schools”应改为“ride to school”；“in the places all over the city”可以简化为“throughout the city”。建议使用“especially”和“also”清晰连接两个例子，并补充一个具体原因或结果。

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among school students. Many of them ride to school because it is cheap and convenient. In addition, shared bikes are widely available throughout major cities, so people often use them for short trips.

× I lived in a countryside.

✓ I lived in the countryside.

“countryside”表示乡村这一整体概念时，通常与定冠词“the”搭配，不能使用不定冠词“a”。建议记住固定表达“in the countryside”。

× so there are there.

✓ so there were a lot of roads for me to ride a bike on.

“there are”用于现在时，但本段是在谈童年经历，应使用过去时“there were”。另外，“there”重复使用错误。描述某处存在某物时，应使用“there was/were + 名词”。

× There were a lot loads for me to write a bag.

✓ There were a lot of roads for me to ride a bike on.

“a lot loads”不是正确的数量表达，应使用“a lot of + 可数名词复数”。“roads”是可数名词复数，因此应说“a lot of roads”。

× There were a lot loads for me to write a bag.

✓ There were a lot of roads for me to ride a bike on.

这里谈的是泛指的道路，不需要使用“the”。应使用“a lot of roads”。

× Yes, uh, I think they are very popular in school students.

✓ Yes, I think they are very popular among school students.

表示“在某一群体中受欢迎”时，通常使用介词“among”，而不是“in”。“among school students”表示“在学生群体中”。

× They almost got one bike to ride for their schools.

✓ Almost all of them have a bike to ride to school.

问题询问自行车在国家中的当前流行情况，因此应使用现在时“have”，而不是过去时“got”。此外，“almost all of them”表示“几乎所有人”，比“they almost got”更准确。

× They almost got one bike to ride for their schools.

✓ Almost all of them have a bike to ride to school.

表示“骑车去学校”时，应使用“ride to school”，而不是“ride for their schools”。“to”表示方向或目的地。

× There are many shared bikes in the places all over the city.

✓ There are many shared bikes in places all over the city.

“places”在这里是泛指城市各处，不需要定冠词“the”。应说“in places all over the city”。