Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear, relevant, and well developed, with specific details about the bicycle. However, use the past tense consistently: say “I really liked it,” “It had ribbons,” and “I could ring the bell.” Also, “ring the bell” is more natural than “sound the bell.” Avoid repeating “bike” too often by using “bicycle” or “it.”

例: Yes, I did. I got my first bicycle when I was about four years old. I really liked it because it was pink, and it had ribbons on the handlebars and a little bell. I often rode it around my neighborhood with my parents.

提案: You give a direct answer and provide a relevant reason, but the response is unfinished, which prevents you from fully developing your idea. Avoid repetition in “It is It is,” and use the plural form “bikes” or the phrase “ride a bike.” Also, say “a common form of transportation” rather than “a common transport.” Complete your final point with a specific benefit, such as avoiding traffic, saving money, or exercising.

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in large cities. Many people ride them to work or school because they are affordable and help people avoid traffic. In addition, cycling is a convenient way to exercise and reduce pollution.

× I really like it because it was pink.

✓ I really liked it because it was pink.

The question asks about your childhood, so the answer should consistently use the past tense. Use liked instead of like because you no longer necessarily have or use that childhood bicycle.

× It has ribbons on it and a little bell that I could sound while riding my bike near our house.

✓ It had ribbons on it and a little bell that I could ring while riding my bike near our house.

The bicycle belonged to the past, so had is more appropriate than has. Also, ring is the natural verb used with a bell. When describing past experiences, check that all main verbs consistently refer to the past.

× A lot of people ride their bike on their way to work as well as when going to school.

✓ A lot of people ride their bikes on their way to work as well as when going to school.

The plural possessive determiner their refers to multiple people's bicycles, so the noun should also be plural: bikes. Remember to use a plural noun when the meaning refers to more than one item.

× It is It is a common transport for people in the city and also people use it for

✓ It is a common means of transportation for people in the city, and people also use it to travel to work and school.

The original sentence repeats It is and ends with the incomplete phrase use it for. A complete sentence needs a clear, finished structure. Avoid repeating words, and complete the phrase by stating the purpose of using bicycles. The expression means of transportation is also more natural than common transport in this context.