Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is unclear and contradictory: you first say that you did not have a bike, but then mention that you usually had a bicycle. Use the past tense consistently and answer the question directly. Avoid unnatural phrases such as “used to take going” and the unfinished ending “now also by.” Give one or two specific details about how often you rode a bike and what you used it for.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. I only rode my friends’ bicycles occasionally, usually for fun or when we went around the neighborhood together. I didn’t own one myself because my parents thought it was unnecessary.

提案: Answer the question directly and avoid repeating “bikes” several times. The phrase “more popular in male males” is incorrect; say “more popular among men” instead. Explain why bikes are popular and distinguish between motorcycles and bicycles if that is what you mean. Use linking words such as “especially” or “because” to make your ideas clearer.

例: Yes, motorcycles are very popular in India, especially among men. Many people use them for commuting because they are more affordable and convenient than cars, particularly in busy cities. Young people also enjoy riding them for recreation and meeting up with friends.

× I usually have a bicycle which I used to take going from one place to another just for fun or with friends very occasionally and now also by.

✓ I usually had a bicycle, which I used to ride from one place to another, either for fun or with friends. I also ride one now.

Because the question asks about your childhood, the past-tense form had is needed instead of have. The phrase I usually have describes a present habit, while I usually had describes a past habit.

× I usually have a bicycle which I used to take going from one place to another just for fun or with friends very occasionally and now also by.

✓ I usually had a bicycle, which I used to ride from one place to another, either for fun or with friends. I also ride one now.

The original sentence is too long and ends with the incomplete phrase and now also by. Dividing it into two complete sentences makes the meaning clear. Each sentence should contain a complete subject and verb.

× Bikes people usually have bikes but I would say bikes are more popular in male males which they use for going and having fun.

✓ People in India commonly own bikes, but I would say that bikes are more popular among men, who use them for transportation and fun.

The preposition among is used when discussing a group of people. Therefore, more popular among men is correct, whereas more popular in male males is not.

× Bikes people usually have bikes but I would say bikes are more popular in male males which they use for going and having fun.

✓ People in India commonly own bikes, but I would say that bikes are more popular among men, who use them for transportation and fun.

The relative pronoun who should be used to refer to people, such as men. Which is generally used to refer to things. In this sentence, who use them correctly refers to men, and them refers to bikes.

× Bikes people usually have bikes but I would say bikes are more popular in male males which they use for going and having fun.

✓ People in India commonly own bikes, but I would say that bikes are more popular among men, who use them for transportation and fun.

The original sentence has an incorrect word order and repeats bikes unnecessarily. A clear sentence structure is subject + verb + object: People in India commonly own bikes. The conjunction but then introduces the contrasting idea.