Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the question more directly by saying “Yes, I did” at the beginning. Improve the grammar in “I remember myself having” by using “I remember having,” and say “My grandfather taught me how to ride it” instead of “taught that to me.” Avoid repetition and self-correction, such as “I I’ve,” and use a linking word such as “because” or “also” to connect your supporting details. The answer has relevant and specific details, but it should be smoother and more accurate.

例: Yes, I did. I had a blue bike, which was very precious to me, and I started riding it when I was about four. My grandfather taught me how to ride it, so I have many happy memories of cycling with my neighbors and relatives.

提案: Begin with a clear answer such as “Yes, definitely,” rather than “Who say yes.” Avoid repeated words and self-corrections, including “I I,” “sliding from sliding,” and “I would, I would.” Use more natural expressions: “posting videos online,” “riding down mountain paths,” and “performing tricks on stairs.” Give a specific example and connect it logically with “for example” or “as a result.”

例: Yes, definitely. Bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among children and teenagers. For example, many young people post videos online of themselves riding down mountain paths or performing tricks on stairs. This suggests that cycling is both a common hobby and a popular form of entertainment.

× I remember myself having a blue bike.

✓ I remember having a blue bike.

The reflexive pronoun myself is unnecessary after remember in this sentence. Use remember + gerund when recalling a past experience: I remember having a blue bike.

× My grandfather actually taught that to me, how to ride a bike and I I've had so many memories.

✓ My grandfather actually taught me how to ride a bike, and I've had so many memories of it.

With teach, use the structure teach + person + how to + verb. Therefore, taught me how to ride a bike is correct. The pronoun that is unnecessary here. The repeated subject I I is also removed.

× Who say yes, because I I see children nowadays are posting stuff about bikes and sliding from sliding back and forth from the mountains, stairs, all kinds of stuff.

✓ I would say yes because I see children nowadays posting things about bikes and sliding back and forth down mountains and stairs and doing all kinds of things.

Who say yes does not form a correct sentence because who is not the intended subject. Begin with I would say yes. After see, use the structure see + object + present participle: see children posting. The repeated words I I and from sliding are also removed to make the sentence grammatically complete and clear.

× Who say yes, because I I see children nowadays are posting stuff about bikes and sliding from sliding back and forth from the mountains, stairs, all kinds of stuff.

✓ I would say yes because I see children nowadays posting things about bikes and sliding back and forth down mountains and stairs and doing all kinds of things.

Use down rather than from when describing movement along or from the top of mountains or stairs. The phrase slide down mountains and stairs is the appropriate prepositional expression.