Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the question directly and use accurate grammar. Say “when I was a child,” not “when I was child,” and use “ride it” rather than “ride on it.” For a past event, use the past simple: “I got a bicycle when I was sixteen.” Since you are describing a continuing situation, use the present perfect or present simple correctly: “I have used it” or “I use it.” Also, use the singular form “bicycle” consistently and avoid the awkward phrase “doing physical activities.”

例: No, I didn’t have a bicycle when I was a child because I was afraid of riding one. However, I got my first bike when I was sixteen, and I have used it regularly ever since. I mainly use it for shopping and getting some exercise.

提案: Begin with a clear topic sentence, such as “Yes, bikes are very popular in my country.” Avoid the incorrect structure “Certainly it is they are” and use subject–verb agreement: “residents like,” not “residents likes.” Replace “ride on it” with “ride them” when referring to bikes in general, and say “to reach different places” instead of “for reaching to different locations.” Connect the contrast in one complete sentence: “Younger people use bikes to get around, while older people use them for errands and daily activities.”

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country, especially in cities. People of all ages use them because they are convenient, affordable, and environmentally friendly. Younger people often ride them to school or work, while older residents use them for shopping and other daily errands.

× I never had a bicycle when I was child because I was afraid to ride on it.

✓ I never had a bicycle when I was a child because I was afraid to ride it.

The singular countable noun child requires the indefinite article a. The preposition on is unnecessary with ride when referring to riding a bicycle. Improvement: use a before singular countable nouns when speaking generally or introducing one member of a group.

× However, I got a bicycle when I was sixteen years old and since then I'm using that bicycles in my daily life from shopping to doing physical activities.

✓ However, I got a bicycle when I was sixteen years old, and since then I have been using that bicycle in my daily life, from shopping to doing physical activities.

The phrase since then describes an action that began in the past and continues to the present, so the present perfect progressive have been using is more appropriate than the present progressive am using. Improvement: use have or has been plus the verb ending in -ing with since and for when an activity has continued over time.

× However, I got a bicycle when I was sixteen years old and since then I'm using that bicycles in my daily life from shopping to doing physical activities.

✓ However, I got a bicycle when I was sixteen years old, and since then I have been using that bicycle in my daily life, from shopping to doing physical activities.

The determiner that refers to one thing, so it must be followed by the singular noun bicycle, not the plural noun bicycles. Improvement: use this or that with a singular noun and these or those with a plural noun.

× Certainly it is they are really popular in my country.

✓ Certainly, they are really popular in my country.

The sentence incorrectly combines the pronoun it with they. Bikes is plural, so the correct pronoun is they. Improvement: choose a pronoun that agrees in number with the noun it replaces.

× Regardless of age, all the residents likes to ride on it as per their needs.

✓ Regardless of age, all residents like to ride them according to their needs.

The subject all residents is plural, so the verb must be the plural form like, not the singular form likes. Improvement: use the base form of the verb after plural subjects in the present tense.

× Regardless of age, all the residents likes to ride on it as per their needs.

✓ Regardless of age, all residents like to ride them according to their needs.

The plural noun bikes requires the plural pronoun them, not the singular pronoun it. Improvement: make sure pronouns agree with the number of the nouns they refer to.

× Since younger people use it for reaching to different locations.

✓ Younger people use them to reach different locations.

The original sentence begins with since, which normally introduces a dependent clause and leaves the sentence incomplete. Removing since creates a complete sentence with a subject and a main verb. Improvement: avoid beginning a standalone sentence with a subordinating conjunction unless it is connected to an independent clause.

× Since younger people use it for reaching to different locations.

✓ Younger people use them to reach different locations.

The pronoun it is singular, but it refers to bikes, which is plural. The correct pronoun is them. Improvement: use plural pronouns for plural nouns.

× On the other hand, old senior citizens use it for daily activities.

✓ On the other hand, older citizens use them for their daily activities.

The pronoun it should be them because it refers to bikes. The possessive determiner their also clearly indicates that the activities belong to the citizens. Improvement: check whether the noun being replaced is singular or plural before selecting a pronoun.