Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear, direct, and well organized. You use “Instead” effectively to add a supporting detail, and the specific example about learning to balance makes the answer natural. To improve it, use a more natural phrase than “in our street,” such as “on our street,” and consider adding a brief result or feeling to make the response slightly more developed.

例: No, I didn’t have my own bike when I was a child. Instead, I sometimes borrowed my sister’s bike and practiced on our street. It took me a few days to learn how to balance, but I eventually became quite comfortable riding it.

提案: Your main idea is understandable, but there are frequent grammar and word-choice errors. Use “people” instead of “worker and person,” “bicycles are an affordable form of transport” instead of “bike is cheap rated things,” and “ride them” instead of “control these things.” Avoid repetition and organize the answer with a clear reason and a specific example, such as seeing many cyclists in cities or commuters using bikes to save money.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in large cities. Many people use them to commute because they are affordable and help them avoid traffic jams. For example, it is common to see office workers and students riding bicycles during rush hour.

× Yes, in my country bikes are very popular because all of the worker and person like to use the bike in the street.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many workers and other people like to ride them in the street.

Worker and person are singular nouns, but the sentence refers to multiple people. Use the plural forms workers and people. Also, use bikes and them when speaking about bikes in general.

× Yes, in my country bikes are very popular because all of the worker and person like to use the bike in the street.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many workers and other people like to ride them in the street.

The definite article the is unnecessary before bike when discussing bikes in general. Use the plural noun bikes instead. The phrase all of the worker and person is also unnatural; many workers and other people is more grammatically appropriate.

× You can see all of them are bike because bike is cheap rated things and all the person control these things.

✓ You can see that many people are riding bikes because bikes are inexpensive means of transportation, and people can use them.

Bike and thing should be plural when referring to bikes generally and to multiple objects. Use bikes and means of transportation. Person should also be changed to people because it refers to more than one person.

× You can see all of them are bike because bike is cheap rated things and all the person control these things.

✓ You can see that many people are riding bikes because bikes are inexpensive means of transportation, and people can use them.

The sentence needs that after see to connect the ideas clearly. The original sentence also combines several unclear clauses. Dividing the information into logically connected clauses makes the sentence easier to understand.

× You can see all of them are bike because bike is cheap rated things and all the person control these things.

✓ You can see that many people are riding bikes because bikes are inexpensive means of transportation, and people can use them.

Cheap rated is not a natural adjective phrase in this context. Use inexpensive or affordable to describe bikes. The phrase inexpensive means of transportation is clear and natural.

× You can see all of them are bike because bike is cheap rated things and all the person control these things.

✓ You can see that many people are riding bikes because bikes are inexpensive means of transportation, and people can use them.

The pronoun them should clearly refer to bikes. These things is vague and unnatural here, so replace it with them. Also, all of them does not clearly identify the people or objects being discussed.