Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答直接表达了“有自行车”，也提供了购买者、生日礼物和使用场景等细节，内容方向较好。但存在明显的词汇和语法错误：应使用“bike”而不是“back”，“my parents bought it for me”而不是“it was my parents bought me”，“ride this bike”而不是“read this bike”。同时，重复、犹豫词较多，影响自然度。建议使用“because/so”连接细节，并将答案控制在2—3个清晰句子内。

例: Yes, I did. My parents bought me a bike as a birthday present when I was a child. I used to ride it to the park with my friends almost every day, so I have very fond memories of it.

提案: 回答观点明确，并给出了价格便宜、使用方便以及上班族和学生使用等具体理由，基本符合“观点＋原因＋例子”的结构。但“because they have they are”语法错误，应改为“because they are”；“write back”应改为“ride a bike”，并且“for the people”表达不自然。建议减少重复和停顿，使用更准确的表达，例如“commuters ride bikes to work”以及“students cycle to school”。

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because they are affordable and convenient. Many office workers ride them to work, while students often cycle to school, especially when the weather is pleasant. They are also a good way to avoid traffic jams.

× I remember it was my parents bought me

✓ I remember that my parents bought it for me

“it was my parents bought me”把两个句子结构混在了一起。这里应使用“that”引导宾语从句，或者直接说“My parents bought me a bike”。另外，买东西给某人时，可以使用“buy something for someone”的结构。

× it's my birthday gift

✓ it was a birthday gift

这件礼物发生在过去，且前文使用了过去时“had”和“was”。因此应将现在时“is”改为过去时“was”。同时，“birthday gift”前应使用不定冠词“a”。

× I almost read this back to go to the park with my friends every day

✓ I often rode this bike to the park with my friends every day

描述童年时每天发生的动作，应使用过去时。“read”不是这里需要的动词；骑自行车应使用“ride”，其过去式是“rode”。此外，“often”比“almost”更适合表示“经常”。

× because they have they are very cheap and convenient

✓ because they are very cheap and convenient

“they have they are”中重复使用了两个主语和谓语结构，导致句子结构错误。这里直接使用“they are”即可，因为“cheap and convenient”是形容词，应该使用系动词“are”。

× convenient for the people

✓ convenient for people

这里的“people”表示泛指人们，不是特定的一群人，因此不需要使用定冠词“the”。只有在指代特定的人群时，才使用“the people”。

× the many office workers and the students

✓ many office workers and students

这里是在泛指办公室职员和学生，不是指特定的人群，所以应删除“the”。并列名词在表示一般类别时通常不加定冠词。