Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答基本切题，也提供了自行车的用途和感受，结构较完整。但开头的“Yes, yes of course”有重复；“small ride bike”应改为“small bike”或“small riding bike”；“I wrote it”应改为“I rode it”；“feel feel”是重复错误。建议使用更自然的表达，并通过一个具体细节丰富答案，例如说明自行车的颜色或骑车时的感受。

例: Yes, I did. My parents bought me a small blue bike when I was about eight years old. I used to ride it to the park and visit my friends almost every weekend. I really enjoyed cycling because it was fun and gave me a sense of freedom.

提案: 回答直接清楚，观点、原因和具体例子都很完整，连接词“because”和“For example”使用得当。主要问题是“especially in such a big city”表达不够自然，可以改为“especially in large cities”；“Well, umm”和“Uh”属于不必要的填充词，可能影响流利度。此外，题目问的是整个国家，可以先概括全国情况，再补充大城市中的例子。

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in large cities. They are affordable and convenient for short journeys, so many people use shared bikes to get to supermarkets or subway stations. In addition, cycling has become more common because it is also an environmentally friendly way to travel.

× It was small ride bike that my parents bought me.

✓ It was a small bike that my parents bought me.

“bike”是可数名词单数，前面通常需要使用冠词。这里应在“small bike”前加不定冠词“a”。同时，“ride”不能直接放在“small”和“bike”之间；根据上下文，直接使用“small bike”即可。

× I wrote it almost every weekend because it was fun and it helped me feel feel free.

✓ I rode it almost every weekend because it was fun and it helped me feel free.

这里描述童年时过去的经历，所以使用一般过去时。“ride”的过去式是“rode”，而“wrote”是“write”的过去式，意思是“写”。另外，“feel”重复了一次，应删除一个。建议注意不规则动词的过去式，例如：ride—rode—ridden，write—wrote—written。

× Uh, because they're cheap and convenient for short trips.

✓ I think bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in big cities, because they're cheap and convenient for short trips.

原句以“Because”开头，但它只是原因从句，不能单独构成完整句子，属于句子结构不完整。可以把它和前面的主句合并，形成“主句 + because原因从句”的完整结构。