Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly, but avoid repeating the wording of the question. Add one or two specific details, such as when you used the bike, where you rode it, or how you felt about it. This will make your answer more developed while keeping it natural and within five sentences.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I often rode it around my neighborhood after school, especially at weekends. It was a simple blue bike, but I really enjoyed riding it with my friends.

提案: State your opinion clearly and use the correct verb “ride,” not “rise.” Avoid sentence fragments and repetition such as “just for a just for fun.” Explain why bikes are popular and mention different types of bikes or purposes, using linking words such as “because,” “especially,” or “also.”

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in big cities. Many people ride electric bikes to work because they are convenient and affordable. Others ride traditional bicycles for exercise or simply for fun.

× Well, nowadays many people rise. Electric bikes when they go somewhere or just for a just for fun.

✓ Well, nowadays many people ride electric bikes when they go somewhere or just for fun.

The original response is not a complete, well-structured sentence because the phrase Electric bikes when they go somewhere is separated from the main clause. The word rise is also not the correct verb for using a bicycle; ride is required. In addition, just for a just for fun contains unnecessary repeated words. Combine the ideas into one complete sentence and use the fixed expression just for fun.