Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 「Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.」という直接的な答えはできていますが、その後の文は語順や文の組み立てが不自然で、途中で言い直しが多くなっています。「I rode it to swimming lessons at school and other training schools.」のように、主語＋動詞の形を明確にし、「also」などのつなぎ言葉を使って整理しましょう。また、子どもの頃の具体的な思い出や、どのくらいの頻度で乗ったかを1文加えると、より自然で効果的な回答になります。

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I often rode it to swimming lessons and other activities. It was a convenient way to get around, and I really enjoyed riding it.

提案: 「Yes, bikes are popular in Japan.」と最初に直接答えましょう。「it is popular that it is common」や「many worlds are narrow」は不自然なので、「Many roads in Japan are narrow」または「Japan has many narrow roads」と表現します。また、「than compared with other countries」は重複しているため、「compared with other countries」だけで十分です。最後は「Bikes are useful for getting through narrow streets」や「They are convenient for short trips」のように、理由を明確に述べてください。

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in Japan. Many roads are narrow, especially in residential areas, so cycling is often easier than driving. In addition, bikes are convenient for short trips and do not require much parking space.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was a child and I went to I rode on it when I. Went to swimming in school or other kind of uh. Training school.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, and I rode it when I went swimming at school or at another kind of training school.

The original response contains broken and repeated sentence parts, such as 'I went to I rode on it' and 'when I. Went'. These parts should be reorganized into one complete sentence with a clear subject, verb, and object.

× Went to swimming

✓ went swimming

After the verb 'go' used for activities, use the pattern 'go + -ing'. Therefore, 'went swimming' is correct, not 'went to swimming'.

× ride bike in country

✓ ride a bike in the country

A singular countable noun such as 'bike' normally needs an article, so use 'a bike'. The noun 'country' also needs a determiner here, so 'the country' is appropriate when referring to a specific country.

× I think it is popular that it is common to ride bike in country

✓ I think bikes are popular because it is common to ride a bike in the country.

The structure 'it is popular that' is not appropriate in this context. Use 'because' to give the reason for the popularity, and make the sentence structure more direct.

× many worlds are narrow than compared with other countries

✓ many worlds are narrower than those in other countries

For a comparison, use the comparative form 'narrower', not 'narrow'. Also, do not use both 'than' and 'compared with' together in the same comparison.

× many worlds are narrower than compared with other countries

✓ many worlds are narrower than those in other countries

The comparison needs a clear object after 'than'. The pronoun 'those' refers to the corresponding objects in other countries and makes the comparison grammatically complete.

× it is easier to go through by

✓ it is easier to get around by bike

The phrase 'go through by' is not the appropriate prepositional expression for traveling around a place. Use 'get around by bike' to express traveling from place to place by bicycle.