Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the question directly and avoid repeating or correcting yourself. Use the correct vocabulary and grammar: say “my father bought me a bike,” “taught me how to ride it,” and “the bike was pink.” Organize the answer with a clear topic sentence followed by specific supporting details. The phrase “as far as I remember” is appropriate, but it should be placed naturally in the sentence.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was seven. My father bought it for me and taught me how to ride it in a nearby park. As far as I remember, it was pink, and riding it made me feel happy and more independent.

提案: State your opinion more naturally by saying “Based on what I have observed” or “In my experience.” Avoid repeating the same idea in “I observe and experience” and “that’s what I have seen.” Use plural nouns and correct subject-verb agreement: “motorcycles and cars are” and “they are.” Add a specific reason or comparison, such as traffic, distance, or convenience, and use a linking word such as “because” or “whereas” to connect your ideas.

例: No, I don’t think bikes are very popular in my country. Based on what I have observed, most people prefer motorcycles and cars because they are faster and more convenient, especially when they need to travel long distances or get to work. However, bicycles are becoming more common among people who exercise or want to avoid traffic.

× Yes, your father bought me a bag when I was seven years old.

✓ Yes, my father bought me a bag when I was seven years old.

The speaker is talking about their own father, so the possessive pronoun should be my, not your. Make sure possessive pronouns agree with the speaker or the person being discussed.

× He teach me how to write it in the park.

✓ He taught me how to write it in the park.

The question asks about a childhood experience in the past. Therefore, teach must be changed to its past-tense form, taught. When describing completed past events, use the past form of the verb.

× The color of my bike as I, as far as I remember, is pink.

✓ As far as I remember, the color of my bike was pink.

The speaker is describing the color of a bike they had as a child, so the past-tense form was is more suitable than is. The phrase as far as I remember should also be placed at the beginning to make the sentence clearer.

× The color of my bike as I, as far as I remember, is pink.

✓ As far as I remember, the color of my bike was pink.

The original sentence has an interrupted and confusing structure because as I is incomplete and is inserted in the wrong position. Use a complete introductory phrase, such as As far as I remember, followed by the main clause.

× As what I I observe and experience, I don't think bikes are popular in our country because that's what I have seen.

✓ Based on what I observe and experience, I don't think bikes are popular in our country because that is what I have seen.

As what is not a correct introductory structure, and I is unnecessarily repeated. Use Based on what I observe and experience or From what I have observed and experienced to introduce the speaker's opinion clearly.

× Most people use motorcycle and cars because it is more convenient and it is faster to use when they have their appointment.

✓ Most people use motorcycles and cars because they are more convenient and faster to use when they have appointments.

Motorcycle refers to people in general, so it should be plural: motorcycles. Appointment should also be plural because people generally have more than one appointment. Use plural nouns when speaking about a general group or repeated situations.

× Most people use motorcycle and cars because it is more convenient and it is faster to use when they have their appointment.

✓ Most people use motorcycles and cars because they are more convenient and faster to use when they have appointments.

The subject motorcycles and cars is plural, so it must be referred to with they are, not it is. Make sure the subject and verb agree in number: plural subjects take plural verbs.