Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer directly addresses the question and includes a specific detail about your age and who bought the bike. However, the phrase “when I was a child” is repeated, and “As far as I remember” is slightly unnecessary because the information is simple and clear. To make the answer more natural and effective, add one brief detail about how you used the bike or how you felt about it. Use a linking word such as “I remember that” or “After that” to connect the details smoothly.

例: Yes, I did. My father bought me a bike when I was seven years old, and I was extremely excited because it was my first one. I used to ride it around my neighborhood after school.

提案: You give a relevant reason, but the answer contains several repetitions and unnatural phrases, such as “No, I think no,” “as far as I remember,” and “as what I have experienced.” The sentence is also grammatically incomplete at the end, so the response lacks a clear conclusion. Begin directly with “No, they aren’t very popular,” explain that people prefer cars and motorcycles because they are more convenient, and add a specific comparison or example. Avoid restarting sentences and make sure every sentence is complete.

例: No, bikes aren’t very popular in my country. Most people prefer motorcycles or cars because they are faster and more convenient, especially for commuting long distances. However, bicycles are becoming more common among young people who use them for exercise or short trips.

× No, I think no, because ...

✓ No, I don't think so because ...

The expression 'I think no' is not the natural structure for giving a negative opinion. Use 'I don't think so' when referring back to the previous yes-or-no question. This makes the answer grammatically complete and natural.

× as what I have experienced and as what I have observed

✓ from what I have experienced and observed

The phrase 'as what' is incorrect in this context. Use 'from what' to introduce information based on personal experience or observation. Also, 'experienced and observed' avoids unnecessary repetition of the phrase 'as what I have'.

× most people in our country now use motorcycles, cars because it's it, it is more convenient to them.

✓ Most people in our country now use motorcycles and cars because these vehicles are more convenient for them.

Use 'for them', not 'to them', when describing something that provides convenience. Also, 'motorcycles and cars' correctly joins the two plural nouns, and 'these vehicles' clearly refers to both nouns. Avoid repeating 'it's it, it is'.

× And you see, I think when they use.

✓ I think people prefer these vehicles because they are more convenient.

The original sentence is incomplete: the clause beginning with 'when' does not express a complete idea. A complete sentence needs a main clause with a clear meaning. Avoid starting a new sentence with an unfinished 'when' clause.