Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevabınız soruya doğrudan yanıt veriyor ve bisikletin rengi gibi güzel bir ayrıntı içeriyor. Ancak geçmişten bahsettiğiniz için “I have a bike” yerine “I had a bike” ve “I was really loving biking” yerine “I really enjoyed riding it” kullanmalısınız. “Sparkles” çoğul olduğu için “on it” değil, “on it” ifadesi bisikleti belirtirken daha doğal olur; ayrıca “them” yanlış zamirdir. Cevabı daha doğal ve etkili yapmak için bisikleti nasıl kullandığınızı veya o bisiklet hakkında nasıl hissettiğinizi bir sonuç cümlesiyle açıklayabilirsiniz.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. When I was about six, my dad bought me my first one. It was pink with sparkly decorations, and I really enjoyed riding it around my neighborhood. I have fond memories of using it during the summer.

提案: Ana fikriniz anlaşılabilir olsa da cevapta tekrarlar, tereddüt ifadeleri ve çelişkili yapı bulunuyor: “I don't think so”, “I don't think it's popular” ve “I don't think it's not...” aynı fikri gereksiz şekilde tekrarlıyor. “Mostly children bikes” yerine “Bikes are mostly used by children” ve “in traffic” yerine “because the roads are often crowded” gibi daha doğal ve açıklayıcı ifadeler kullanmalısınız. Önce net bir görüş belirtin, ardından “However” veya “because” ile neden ve karşılaştırma ekleyin. Ülkenizde bisikletlerin neden yetişkinler arasında daha az kullanıldığına dair belirli bir neden vermeniz cevabın içeriğini güçlendirir.

例: No, I wouldn’t say bikes are very popular in my country. They are mostly used by children for fun, while adults tend to use cars or public transportation. This is mainly because the roads are often crowded and there are not many dedicated bike lanes. However, cycling is becoming more common in some larger cities.

× Yes, I have a bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike.

The question asks about a past situation in childhood, so the past-tense form had is needed instead of the present-tense form have.

× It was pink and it had sparkles on them.

✓ It was pink and it had sparkles on it.

The pronoun them refers to plural nouns, but the bike is singular. Use the singular pronoun it to refer to the bike.

× I was really loving biking at that time.

✓ I really loved riding my bike at that time.

The simple past loved is more appropriate for describing a past feeling or preference. Also, riding my bike is the more natural expression for this activity.

× I don't think it's popular, but umm, I don't think it's not, uh, very common MO in my country.

✓ I don't think bikes are popular, and I don't think they are very common in my country.

The pronoun it is unclear because the subject is bikes, which is plural. Use they to refer to bikes. The original phrase also contains a confusing double negative, so use a clear negative structure: I don't think they are very common.

× Mostly children bikes, but in traffic.

✓ Bikes are mostly used by children, but they are not very common in traffic.

The original expression is a sentence fragment because it does not contain a complete verb structure. A complete sentence needs a subject and a verb. The passive structure are mostly used clearly expresses how the bikes are used.