Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly in the past tense and organize your ideas into a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details. Use “cycling was my favorite sport,” “my father and I,” and “we would ride to nearby neighborhoods.” Avoid incomplete phrases such as “far down and” and “the beauty of our.” Keep the answer to two or three complete sentences and use a linking word such as “because” or “also” to connect your reason and details.

例: Yes, I did. Cycling was my favorite sport when I was a child, and my father and I would often ride our bikes to nearby neighborhoods. We enjoyed exploring the area and taking in the beautiful scenery together.

提案: Give a direct answer using the plural form “bikes are very popular.” Improve naturalness by saying “people use them for exercise and transportation” instead of “use it as a tool.” Group your reasons clearly with linking words, and finish the final idea instead of saying “friends and every.” Add one specific example, such as commuting short distances or riding with family on weekends.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in the Philippines. People use them for exercise and for traveling short distances, especially between nearby towns. In addition, cycling is a great way to spend time with family and friends, such as riding together on weekends.

× When I was a child, cycling is my favorite sport.

✓ When I was a child, cycling was my favorite sport.

The phrase when I was a child refers to a past period, so the verb be should be in the past tense: was, not is.

× Me and my father will go to nearest neighbor far down and.

✓ My father and I would go to the nearest neighborhood far away.

My father and I is the correct subject form. Me is an object pronoun and should not be used as part of the subject.

× Me and my father will go to nearest neighbor far down and.

✓ My father and I would go to the nearest neighborhood far away.

Because the student is describing childhood experiences, would is more appropriate than will for a repeated action in the past.

× Me and my father will go to nearest neighbor far down and.

✓ My father and I would go to the nearest neighborhood far away.

A singular countable noun such as neighborhood normally needs a determiner. The definite article the is used because a specific nearby neighborhood is intended.

× Will use our bikes to travel and.

✓ We would use our bikes to travel and see the beauty of our surroundings.

The original fragment has no explicit subject and ends with and, so it is incomplete. Add the subject we, use the appropriate past-time form would, and complete the coordinated verb phrase.

× See the beauty of our.

✓ We would use our bikes to travel and see the beauty of our surroundings.

This fragment is incomplete because our must modify a noun, and the sentence lacks a complete subject and verb. Surroundings completes the noun phrase and can be connected to the preceding sentence.

× It's very popular in my country, the Philippines, because we use it as a tool for exercise for travelling, especially in nearby cities or towns and just bonding with family, friends and every.

✓ Bikes are very popular in my country, the Philippines, because we use them for exercise, traveling, and bonding with family and friends, especially in nearby cities and towns.

Bikes is plural, so it should be replaced with the plural pronoun them. The final word every is incomplete and is removed. The activities are also presented in a parallel form: exercise, traveling, and bonding.

× It's very popular in my country, the Philippines, because we use it as a tool for exercise for travelling, especially in nearby cities or towns and just bonding with family, friends and every.

✓ Bikes are very popular in my country, the Philippines, because we use them for exercise, traveling, and bonding with family and friends, especially in nearby cities and towns.

The subject bikes is plural, so the verb must be are rather than is. The plural noun bikes also requires the plural pronoun them.

× It's very popular in my country, the Philippines, because we use it as a tool for exercise for travelling, especially in nearby cities or towns and just bonding with family, friends and every.

✓ Bikes are very popular in my country, the Philippines, because we use them for exercise, traveling, and bonding with family and friends, especially in nearby cities and towns.

The original sentence begins with the singular pronoun it, but the answer is referring to bikes in general. Use the plural subject bikes with the plural verb are.