Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the question directly, then give one or two clear reasons. Avoid repeating “in my childhood” and “bike,” and use accurate grammar: “bikes were not very popular,” “it was not common,” and “my father could not afford to buy one.” Use a linking word such as “also” only once, and keep the answer to two or three sentences.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. Bikes were not very popular in my area at that time, and my father couldn’t afford to buy one. As a result, I usually walked to school or played with my friends near home.

提案: Give a balanced answer with a clear comparison between rural and urban areas. Replace unclear phrases such as “their roads are very precious to biking” with “the roads are more suitable for cycling,” and avoid repeating “biking,” “cycling,” and “risky.” Use correct forms such as “the roads are congested” and “it is dangerous to cycle.” Add one specific reason, such as traffic conditions or convenience.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in rural areas such as Bliss, where the roads are quieter and more suitable for cycling. However, they are less popular in Dakota because the roads are heavily congested, which makes cycling dangerous. Many people there prefer to use cars or public transportation instead.

× because bike was not very popular

✓ because bikes were not very popular

Bikes are being discussed in general, so the plural noun bikes is more appropriate. The plural subject also requires the plural verb were.

× it's not very common item among the children

✓ they were not very common items among children

A singular countable noun requires an article, but the sentence refers to bikes generally. Therefore, use the plural form items and omit the unnecessary article before children.

× that time

✓ at that time

The standard preposition used with a specific past time is at, as in at that time.

× it's not very common item

✓ they were not very common items

The answer refers to the speaker's childhood, so the past tense were is needed instead of the present-tense form is.

× my father is not capable

✓ my father was not capable

The situation occurred in the past, so was is required instead of the present-tense verb is.

× capable to bought a bike

✓ capable of buying a bike

Capable is followed by the preposition of and a gerund, so use buying rather than to bought. The correct pattern is be capable of doing something.

× so and also my father is not capable to bought a bike for me so I didn't get any bike

✓ Also, my father was not capable of buying a bike for me, so I did not get one

The original sentence uses so and also together awkwardly and repeats so. Use Also to introduce the additional reason and one so to show the result.

× I didn't have a bike in my childhood because bike was not very popular that time and it's not very common item among the children that time so and also my father is not capable to bought a bike for me so I didn't get any bike in my childhood.

✓ I did not have a bike in my childhood because bikes were not very popular at that time and were not very common among children. Also, my father was not capable of buying one for me, so I did not get one.

The original is a run-on sentence containing several repeated conjunctions and unclear connections between ideas. Divide it into clear sentences and use conjunctions only where they show a specific relationship between clauses.

× their roads and roads are very precious to biking

✓ their roads are very suitable for biking

Precious means valuable or rare and does not describe roads that are good for cycling. Suitable for correctly expresses that the roads are appropriate for biking.

× it's very dangerous to cycling

✓ it is very dangerous for cycling

When describing whether an activity is dangerous, use dangerous for followed by a noun or gerund, as in dangerous for cycling. You can also say dangerous to cycle.

× the area I just currently living in, Dakota

✓ the area I am currently living in, Dakota

The clause I currently living in is missing the auxiliary verb am. The present continuous form requires am before living.

× But the area I just currently living in, Dakota, rides very congested and it's very dangerous to cycling or biking is risky.

✓ But the area where I am currently living, Dakota, is very congested, and cycling there is very dangerous.

The original sentence has an incorrect verb attached to the subject area and combines two complete ideas without a clear structure. Use is congested to describe the area and make cycling there the subject of the second clause.