Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the reply more natural and concise, correct the phrasing, and add a brief supporting detail with a linking word. Use ‘terrified of cycling’ or ‘afraid to ride’ and give a short reason or example. Keep it under five sentences.

例: Yes, I did have a bike when I was a child, but I didn’t enjoy riding it because I was terrified of cycling. For example, I fell once and scraped my knee, so I felt nervous whenever I tried to ride again.

提案: Combine the points into one clear topic sentence and add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Improve natural phrasing (e.g., ‘not very popular’ and ‘there isn’t much space’). Keep it concise and avoid repetition.

例: Not really; bicycles aren’t very popular in my country because there isn’t much space to ride them in cities, and busy roads make cycling unsafe for most people.

× 'Yes I did, but I didn't really enjoy it because I was terrified of cycle.'

✓ 'Yes, I did, but I didn't really enjoy it because I was terrified of cycling.'

'Subject-verb agreement is not the issue; the problem is incorrect noun/verb choice and collocation. "Cycle" as a noun needs an article (a cycle) or the gerund "cycling" is used to refer to the activity. In this context you mean the activity of riding a bicycle, so use the gerund "cycling". Also add a comma after "Yes'. Suggestion: say "I was terrified of cycling" or "I was terrified of riding a bicycle".'

× 'Not really. In our country we don't have that much of space to ride a bicycle, so it's not that really popular.'

✓ 'Not really. In our country we don't have that much space to ride a bicycle, so it's not really popular.'

'Incorrect use of prepositions/quantifiers and word order. The phrase "that much of space" is ungrammatical; use "that much space" or "that much of a space" (rare). Also the adverb placement "not that really popular" is awkward: place "really" before "popular" or use "not really popular". Suggestion: say "we don't have that much space" and "so it's not really popular".'