Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Focus on clear, grammatical sentences and a simple logical structure: state whether you had bikes, give one or two specific reasons or details, and avoid repetition. Use correct tense and articles, and keep the answer to at most 4–5 sentences. Add linking words (for example, 'because' or 'so') correctly to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I had several bikes as a child because my mother often bought them for me. I always persuaded her to buy new ones so I could try different colors and styles. I enjoyed riding them outdoors with my friends in the neighborhood. Those rides were a big part of my childhood.

提案: Give a direct opinion first, then support it with specific, relevant reasons and examples. Correct vocabulary (bike, not 'bars' or 'bus' confusion) and use linking phrases (for example, 'firstly', 'also', 'because') to organise your response. Keep sentences grammatical and concise.

例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country. Firstly, I often see people of all ages riding bikes on the streets, especially in cities and small towns. Also, bikes are cheap and convenient for short trips, so many families choose them instead of cars. For example, students often cycle to school because it is fast and economical.

× By my mother bought for me a lot of bikes because I because I really want to have some because I I want to have some outdoor ITV fees.

✓ My mother bought me a lot of bikes because I really wanted to have some for outdoor activities.

Errors: incorrect word order ('By my mother bought for me'), repetition ('because I because I', 'I I'), wrong tense (present 'want' should be past 'wanted' to match 'bought'), and 'outdoor ITV fees' is incorrect word choice. Suggestion: Use subject + verb + object order, remove repetitions, match tense across clauses, and replace unclear phrase with 'outdoor activities'. Grammar problem type ID:26

× So I I always convince my mother to buy me some bikes so that I can change the colour of the bikes and going outside to play it with my friend.

✓ So I always convinced my mother to buy me some bikes so that I could change their colors and go outside to play with my friends.

Errors: repetition ('I I'), tense mismatch (use past 'convinced' to match 'bought'), incorrect verb form 'going' should be base form 'go' after 'and', incorrect pronoun number/possessive ('the bikes' -> 'their' or 'the bikes' and 'friend' -> 'friends'). Suggestion: Remove repetition, keep consistent past tense, use parallel verb forms, and correct plural nouns for agreement. Grammar problem type ID:26

× To realize I believe that bars are really popular in the country.

✓ To be honest, I believe that bikes are really popular in the country.

Errors: 'To realize' is incorrect phrase; should be 'To be honest' or 'Actually'. 'bars' is a likely typo for 'bikes' (word choice). Suggestion: Use a correct discourse marker and correct noun. This is sentence structure and word choice issue. Grammar problem type ID:26

× First of all, I have seen many people ride bikes outside on in the street.

✓ First of all, I have seen many people riding bikes on the street.

Errors: redundant prepositions 'outside on in', verb form should be 'riding' after 'seen' (present participle), and correct preposition is 'on the street'. Suggestion: Use 'seen' + present participle and a single appropriate preposition. Grammar problem type ID:8

× And also the reason why bus already public in the country is because I think it's one of the most convenient vehicle for people in every age.

✓ Also, one reason why bikes are already popular in the country is that I think they are one of the most convenient vehicles for people of all ages.

Errors: missing article/plural forms ('bus' should be 'bikes' and plural), word order ('already public' incorrect; should be 'already popular'), incorrect connector ('is because' is wordy; use 'is that'), subject-verb agreement ('it' -> 'they' to match 'bikes'), and noun phrase ('people in every age' -> 'people of all ages'). Suggestion: Use correct noun and plural agreement, correct adjective 'popular', proper conjunction 'is that', and natural phrase 'people of all ages'. Grammar problem type ID:1}]} Судья: The JSON contains only single quotes and no newlines. (Note: trailing comment removed)