Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Speak in complete sentences, correct grammar and finish your thought. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details using linking words. Avoid sentence fragments and repetition.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a simple red bicycle that my parents bought for me on my eighth birthday, and I rode it every day to visit my friends. Because it was lightweight and easy to handle, I learned to ride quickly and felt very proud of it.

提案: Answer directly, use accurate facts and clear linking words, and avoid vague or incorrect terms (for example, 'studio' is wrong). Provide one clear reason and a specific example. Keep to 2–3 sentences maximum.

例: I think bikes are less common in my country than in places like Amsterdam because our cities are spread out and public transport is more popular. However, some cities such as Konya have long bike paths, so cycling is gradually becoming more popular there.

× that my parents brought it to me in my

✓ That my parents brought it for me when I was young.

The original fragment is a sentence fragment and lacks completion and correct preposition use. It begins with a lowercase letter and does not form a full clause. Change 'to me' to 'for me' (more natural here) and add 'when I was young' to complete the time reference. Also capitalize the first word. Ensure complete sentence structure with subject and verb phrase.

× I would say not common in my country as much as in Amsterdam, of course, but there's a studio called Konya.

✓ I would say bikes are not as common in my country as they are in Amsterdam, of course, but there is a city called Konya.

The original sentence omits the subject and verb after 'I would say' and has word order problems ('not common in my country as much as in Amsterdam'). Insert an explicit subject and verb ('bikes are not as common... as they are in Amsterdam'). Also 'studio' is likely a wrong word choice for a place; 'city' fits context. Use the full form 'there is' or contracted 'there's' consistently. This corrects sentence structure and tense agreement.

× It has the longest bike road in Europe actually.

✓ It actually has the longest bike route in Europe.

Word order is slightly awkward; moving 'actually' before the verb improves natural flow. Also 'bike road' is nonstandard; 'bike route' or 'cycle path' is more idiomatic. This preserves present-tense factual statement while improving phrasing.

× There are some cities

✓ There are some other cities that are also popular for cycling.

The original is an incomplete sentence and leaves the idea unfinished. Completing the sentence by specifying what about those cities (e.g., popular for cycling) resolves the fragment and clarifies meaning. Maintain plural agreement with 'cities'.