Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear, relevant, and well developed. However, “went around via a car” is unnatural; say “got around by car” or “usually travelled by car” instead. You could also use a more natural contraction, such as “I didn’t,” to sound more conversational.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. My parents were quite protective and were worried that I might get hurt. Instead, they usually drove me to school and other places.

提案: You give a direct opinion and two relevant reasons, but several phrases are awkward. Replace “It’s because” with “This is mainly because,” “ride a bicycle going to anywhere” with “cycle anywhere,” and “roads are not quite good or flat” with “the roads are often poorly maintained and uneven.” Also say “book a Grab car or take a taxi” rather than “book a grab car or taxi going to wherever.”

例: I don’t think bikes are very popular in my country. This is mainly because the weather is extremely hot, and many roads are poorly maintained and uneven. As a result, most people prefer to book a Grab car or take a taxi, especially when travelling long distances.

× Instead, I actually went around via a car.

✓ Instead, I actually went around by car.

The preposition by is used to describe the means of transportation. We normally say by car, by bus, or by bike, not via a car in this context.

× It's because the weather is too hot to actually ride a bicycle going to anywhere, and our roads are not quite good or flat for a bicycle ride.

✓ This is because the weather is too hot to ride a bicycle anywhere, and our roads are not in good condition or flat enough for cycling.

The phrase going to anywhere is incorrectly structured. After ride a bicycle, use anywhere directly, or say to go anywhere. The revised sentence also uses the more natural structure in good condition and the adjective flat enough.

× Instead, people book a grab car or taxi going to wherever.

✓ Instead, people book a Grab car or a taxi to go wherever they need to go.

The phrase going to wherever is awkward because the purpose of booking the vehicle should be expressed with the infinitive to go. The expression wherever they need to go is also a complete and natural clause.