Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答直接，结构清晰，也提供了颜色、使用频率和童年经历等具体细节。不过，“wrote it”应改为“rode it”；“my parents bought it for me and I rode it...”中可以使用连接词使句子更自然。建议避免重复“I had a bike”，并加入一个结果或感受，让内容更加丰富。

例: Yes, I had a small black bike when I was a child. My parents bought it for me, and I rode it to the park almost every day. I especially enjoyed riding with my friends after school because it was a fun way to relax.

提案: 回答有“取决于情况”的观点，但没有清楚说明哪些人使用自行车、哪些人不使用，论述不够完整。“the development of society and the technology”应改为“the development of society and technology”；“buy bus”应改为“take the bus”；“elder people doesn't choose bike to walk”应改为“older people don’t choose to ride bikes”。建议使用“although/however/because”等连接词，并举出年轻人骑车通勤或老年人偏好公共交通的具体例子。

例: I think bikes are quite popular, but it depends on the age group and the location. Many young people ride bikes for exercise or to avoid traffic, especially in large cities. However, some older people prefer to drive or take the bus because it is more comfortable and convenient.

× It was a small black bike and my parents bought it for me and I wrote it to the park almost every day.

✓ It was a small black bike that my parents bought for me, and I rode it to the park almost every day.

“wrote”是“write”的过去式，意思是“写”。这里想表达“骑车”，所以应使用“ride”的过去式“rode”。由于整段是在描述童年发生的事情，因此要使用过去时。

× With the development of society and the technology, many people buy cars and buy bus, go to school and study, so elder people doesn't choose bike to walk.

✓ With the development of society and technology, many people buy cars or take buses to go to school and study, so older people don't choose bikes for transportation.

“bus”是可数名词。泛指很多公共汽车时，应使用复数形式“buses”。“bike”在这里表示一类交通工具，也应使用复数“bikes”。注意可数名词单数通常需要限定词，如“a bus”或“a bike”。

× With the development of society and the technology, many people buy cars and buy bus, go to school and study, so elder people doesn't choose bike to walk.

✓ With the development of society and technology, many people buy cars or take buses to go to school and study, so older people don't choose bikes for transportation.

“technology”在这里是不可数名词，表示一般意义上的“科技”，前面不需要使用定冠词“the”。因此应说“society and technology”，而不是“society and the technology”。

× With the development of society and the technology, many people buy cars and buy bus, go to school and study, so elder people doesn't choose bike to walk.

✓ With the development of society and technology, many people buy cars or take buses to go to school and study, so older people don't choose bikes for transportation.

主语“older people”是复数，所以不能使用第三人称单数形式“doesn't”。应使用复数形式“don't”。规则是：复数主语搭配“do not/don't”，例如“People don't choose...”。

× With the development of society and the technology, many people buy cars and buy bus, go to school and study, so elder people doesn't choose bike to walk.

✓ With the development of society and technology, many people buy cars or take buses to go to school and study, so older people don't choose bikes for transportation.

原句把“buy cars”“buy bus”和“go to school and study”等多个动作直接并列，连接关系不清，而且“buy bus”与语境不自然。可以使用“or”连接不同的交通方式，并使用“to go...”说明目的，使句子结构更清晰、完整。