Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the question more directly at the beginning by saying whether you had a bike. The phrase “I hid my bike” is unclear and may not express your intended meaning; use “I had a bike” or “I started riding a bike.” Avoid the awkward expression “a fan of the sport just bike riding in general” and use a more natural phrase such as “a keen cyclist.” You can add one specific detail about how often you rode or who you rode with.

例: Yes, I had a bike from a very young age. My father was a keen cyclist, so he encouraged me to ride regularly. We often went cycling together at weekends, and that made me really interested in biking.

提案: Give a clear answer about the popularity of bikes, then support it with a specific reason. Replace “writing something electric” with “riding electric scooters” or “using electric vehicles,” depending on your meaning. Also, “bikes” is plural, so say “they are not very popular,” and avoid repeating “popular.” You could make the answer more balanced by mentioning that bikes may still be popular for exercise or in certain areas.

例: I would say that traditional bikes are moderately popular in my country, but they are less common among young people than electric scooters. Many people prefer electric transport because it requires less physical effort and is more convenient for commuting. However, cycling is still popular among people who exercise or enjoy outdoor activities.

× Since a very young age I hid my bike because my father was kind of a fan of the sport just bike riding in general, so I had no other choice than also being somehow connected to it.

✓ From a very young age, I hid my bike because my father was kind of a fan of the sport—just bike riding in general—so I had no other choice than also being somehow connected to it.

Since is normally used with a specific starting point, such as since I was five or since 2010. From is more natural when referring to a period of age or life. Use from a very young age to describe something that began during childhood.

× Since a very young age I hid my bike because my father was kind of a fan of the sport just bike riding in general, so I had no other choice than also being somehow connected to it.

✓ From a very young age, I hid my bike because my father was kind of a fan of the sport—just bike riding in general—so I had no choice but to be connected to it.

The standard structure is have no choice but to + base verb. Therefore, have no choice but to be connected is clearer and grammatically more natural than have no other choice than also being connected.

× To be honest, it's not quite popular because nowadays people prefer writing something electric which needs less strain and stamina.

✓ To be honest, they are not very popular because nowadays people prefer using electric vehicles, which require less effort and stamina.

The question refers to bikes, which is plural. Therefore, use the plural pronoun they and the plural verb are instead of the singular pronoun it and the verb is. The relative pronoun which refers to electric vehicles, so the plural verb require is also needed.