Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence and separate your ideas into complete sentences. Use the natural expression “ride a bicycle” or “ride bikes,” not “ride in bicycles.” You could also add a specific detail, such as where you rode or how often, to make the answer more developed and coherent.

例: Yes, I did. I had a small red bicycle, and I loved riding it when I was a child. I usually rode it around my neighborhood after school, especially at weekends.

提案: Give a direct answer and support it with a more specific reason or example. Use “they are considered a means of transportation” or simply “people use them for transportation,” rather than “it is considered as a transportation tool.” Remember to use a plural pronoun such as “they” to refer to “bikes.”

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because they are an affordable and convenient means of transportation. Many people use them to travel short distances, avoid traffic, and get some exercise.

× Yes, I did I had a small red bicycle it was my hobby to ride in bicycles

✓ Yes, I did. I had a small red bicycle. It was my hobby to ride bicycles.

The original response contains several independent clauses joined without periods or other suitable connectors, creating a run-on sentence. Separate the clauses with periods. The phrase 'ride in bicycles' is also corrected to 'ride bicycles' because 'ride' takes 'bicycles' directly in this context.

× Yes, I did I had a small red bicycle it was my hobby to ride in bicycles

✓ Yes, I did. I had a small red bicycle. It was my hobby to ride bicycles.

The preposition 'in' is not used after 'ride' when referring to the activity of riding a bicycle. Say 'ride bicycles' or 'ride a bicycle.'

× Yes I think bikes are popular in my country because it is considered as a transportation tool

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because they are considered a means of transportation.

The pronoun 'it' is singular, but it refers to 'bikes,' which is plural. Therefore, use the plural pronoun 'they' and the plural verb 'are.'

× Yes I think bikes are popular in my country because it is considered as a transportation tool

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because they are considered a means of transportation.

After the passive form of 'consider,' the preposition 'as' is unnecessary when stating what something is regarded as. Use 'are considered a means of transportation,' not 'are considered as a means of transportation.'