Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly with the simple past: use “I didn’t have” instead of “I was not having.” Avoid repeating the same idea about not wanting or thinking about buying a bike. Add one specific reason or a brief alternative childhood activity to make the answer more developed and natural. Also, avoid sentence fragments such as “Because I was.”

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because I wasn’t particularly interested in cycling. Instead, I usually played football with my friends after school.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence and avoid unnecessary repetition, such as “everyone, every child” and “likes to, likes to.” The phrase “learn a new skill” does not clearly explain why bicycles are popular; mention specific reasons, such as exercise, convenience, or inexpensive transport. Complete your answer with a concrete example and avoid ending with “and.”

例: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country, especially among children and young adults. They are affordable, convenient, and a good way to stay fit. For example, many children ride their bikes in local parks or use them to travel short distances.

× I was not having a bike when I was a kid because I was not having any desire to buy a bike.

✓ I did not have a bike when I was a kid because I did not have any desire to buy one.

The verb have is normally used in the simple past to describe possession or a state in the past. Was not having is the past continuous form, which is not natural for this meaning. Use did not have instead. Also, use one to avoid unnecessarily repeating bike.

× I was not having any desire to buy a bike.

✓ I did not have any desire to buy a bike.

When have means possess or experience a feeling or desire, use the simple past form did not have rather than the past continuous form was not having.

× Because I was. I was.

✓ I never thought about buying one.

Because I was is an incomplete dependent clause because it does not express a complete idea. The repeated fragments I was also do not form a complete sentence. Combine the intended meaning into a complete sentence, such as I never thought about buying one.

× I think bikes are more popular in my country.

✓ I think bikes are popular in my country.

More popular is a comparative expression and normally requires a clear comparison, such as more popular than cars. Since the question only asks whether bikes are popular, the simple adjective popular is more appropriate here.

× Yes, I think bikes are more popular in my country because everyone, every child likes to, likes to learn a new skill, which is like cycling or whatever like it is and.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because every child likes to learn a new skill, such as cycling.

The sentence contains repeated words, an unfinished ending, and an unclear relative clause. Remove the repetitions and use such as to introduce an example. The revised sentence has a clear subject, verb, and logical structure.