Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly in the past tense and keep the description consistent. Use “It was red” instead of “it’s red,” “I felt excited when I rode it” instead of “I felt passionate when I’m riding it,” and “It was my favorite toy” instead of “It’s my favorite toy.” Avoid repeating similar ideas such as “I loved it” and “it was my favorite toy” without adding a specific detail.

例: Yes, I had a red bicycle when I was a child. I felt really excited whenever I rode it around my neighborhood. It was my favorite toy because I often used it to visit my friends after school.

提案: Your answer is relevant and includes a reason, but it would sound more natural and organized with a clear topic sentence and a specific supporting example. Avoid fillers such as “I mean” and “so yeah,” and use a linking phrase such as “For example” to connect your idea. You could also mention a type of person or place where cycling is especially common.

例: Yes, definitely. Bikes are quite popular in my country because many people use them to commute and exercise. For example, students often cycle to school, while adults ride along the river or in parks at the weekend.

× Yes, I had a bicycle and it's red.

✓ Yes, I had a bicycle, and it was red.

The question asks about a past childhood experience, so the verb be should be in the past tense: was, not is. Keep the tense consistent with had.

× I felt passionate when I'm riding it and I love it.

✓ I felt passionate when I rode it, and I loved it.

Because the speaker is describing a childhood experience, the verbs should be in the past tense. Use rode instead of am riding and loved instead of love.

× It's my favorite toy when I was a child.

✓ It was my favorite toy when I was a child.

The time expression when I was a child refers to the past, so use the past-tense verb was instead of the present-tense verb is.