Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答内容切题，也提供了购买时间和骑车地点等细节，但存在较多语法和搭配问题。可以说“got a bike as a birthday present”“really liked it”和“used to ride it”，并注意过去时保持一致。最后一句应改为完整句子，例如“Riding around the lake was great fun”。建议使用“because”或“so”连接原因和结果，使表达更自然。

例: Yes, I did. I got a bike as a birthday present when I was ten, and I really liked it. I used to ride it to a nearby lake and cycle around it, because it was a great way to have fun and enjoy the outdoors.

提案: 回答观点明确，也提到了骑车方便以及通勤和上学的用途，但第一句和“shared parks”用词不准确。“in our country”应放在完整句子中，例如“Bikes are very popular in my country because they are convenient”；“shared parks”应改为“bike-sharing schemes”或“shared bikes”。建议补充一个具体结果，例如骑车可以避开交通拥堵或减少污染。

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because they are convenient and affordable. In many cities, there are bike-sharing schemes, so people can easily rent a bike near their homes or workplaces. Many commuters and students use them to avoid traffic and reduce pollution.

× Indeed, I got back as birthday present when I was 10 and I very like it.

✓ Indeed, I got a bike as a birthday present when I was 10, and I really liked it.

“got back”在这里不能正确表达“得到一辆自行车”的意思，而且“as birthday present”缺少完整的名词结构。建议使用“get a bike as a birthday present”表示“收到一辆自行车作为生日礼物”。

× Indeed, I got back as birthday present when I was 10 and I very like it.

✓ Indeed, I got a bike as a birthday present when I was 10, and I really liked it.

可数名词单数“present”前通常需要冠词。这里应使用“a birthday present”，表示“一份生日礼物”。

× Indeed, I got back as birthday present when I was 10 and I very like it.

✓ Indeed, I got a bike as a birthday present when I was 10, and I really liked it.

“very”通常不能直接修饰动词“like”。修饰动词“like”时，应使用副词“really”，即“really liked it”。

× Indeed, I got back as birthday present when I was 10 and I very like it.

✓ Indeed, I got a bike as a birthday present when I was 10, and I really liked it.

问题发生在过去，当时你十岁，所以“like”应使用一般过去时“liked”，与“when I was 10”保持时态一致。

× I used to ride it to a nearby lake and just circling around it and which is a great fun for me.

✓ I used to ride it to a nearby lake and just circle around it, which was great fun for me.

“used to”后面接动词原形。为了保持并列结构，“ride”和“circle”都应使用原形，因此“circling”应改为“circle”。

× I used to ride it to a nearby lake and just circling around it and which is a great fun for me.

✓ I used to ride it to a nearby lake and just circle around it, which was great fun for me.

“and which”在这里连接不自然。前面的完整内容可以用非限制性定语从句“which was great fun for me”补充说明，因此应删除第二个“and”，并在“it”后加逗号。

× I used to ride it to a nearby lake and just circling around it and which is a great fun for me.

✓ I used to ride it to a nearby lake and just circle around it, which was great fun for me.

整段内容描述的是童年时的经历，属于过去。关系从句中的“is”应改为过去式“was”。

× I used to ride it to a nearby lake and just circling around it and which is a great fun for me.

✓ I used to ride it to a nearby lake and just circle around it, which was great fun for me.

“fun”通常是不可数名词，表示“有趣的事情或乐趣”时不能使用“a”。应说“great fun”，而不是“a great fun”。

× Of course, as we can see, it is very convenient and our country.

✓ Of course. As we can see, bikes are very convenient in our country.

表示“在某个国家”时应使用介词“in”，所以应说“in our country”，不能说“and our country”。

× Of course, as we can see, it is very convenient and our country.

✓ Of course. As we can see, bikes are very convenient in our country.

前文谈论的是复数名词“bikes”，因此应继续使用“bikes”作主语，而不是使用单数代词“it”。同时，使用“bikes are”可以使主语和谓语保持一致。