Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 質問には直接答えられていますが、短すぎるため、具体的な情報を1〜2文加えるとよいです。例えば、何歳ごろから乗っていたか、どこで乗っていたか、または自転車についてどう感じていたかを説明してください。

例: Yes, I did. I got my first bike when I was about six, and I often rode it around my neighborhood with my friends.

提案: 主張と理由を述べている点はよいですが、「I think so many people」は不自然なので、「I think bikes are quite popular because many people use them」とすると自然です。また、「while they are going to school or for work」より「to get to school or work」のほうが適切です。さらに、健康面、環境面、交通渋滞の回避など、具体的な理由を1つ加えると内容がより充実します。

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country. Many people use them to get to school or work because they are cheap, convenient, and environmentally friendly.

× I think so many people use bikes while they are going to school or for work.

✓ I think so because many people use bikes when they go to school or work.

The sentence needs the conjunction because to connect the opinion with its reason. Without because, I think so many people can be understood as I think that a large number of people, which does not clearly answer the question. When they go to school or work is also a more natural parallel structure than while they are going to school or for work. Use because to introduce a reason and keep the activities in the same grammatical form: go to school or work.