Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: You repeated the examiner’s question instead of answering it. Respond directly with a clear yes/no answer, then add one or two specific details, such as who gave you the bike, how often you used it, or where you rode it.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My parents gave it to me when I was about eight years old, and I often rode it around my neighborhood with my friends.

提案: Your main idea is clear, but the sentence contains several grammar and word-choice errors. Say “bikes are popular” rather than “bikes are important and popular,” and use “a convenient way to travel” instead of “more convenient when a way travelling.” Also, explain why they are popular with a specific reason, such as being affordable, healthy, or useful for short journeys. Use a linking word such as “because” to connect your ideas.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among young people. They are an affordable and convenient way to travel short distances, and they also help people avoid traffic jams. However, most people still use cars or public transportation for longer journeys.

× Yes, I think bikes are really very important and popular in my country, it is more convenient when a way travelling to another city.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are really important and popular in my country because they are a convenient way to travel to another city.

The pronoun it does not agree with or clearly refer to the plural noun bikes. Use they to refer to bikes. When referring to a plural subject, make sure the pronoun is also plural.

× Yes, I think bikes are really very important and popular in my country, it is more convenient when a way travelling to another city.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are really important and popular in my country because they are a convenient way to travel to another city.

The original sentence joins two complete clauses with only a comma, creating a comma splice. Use a suitable conjunction such as because to show the relationship between the ideas. Avoid joining independent clauses with a comma alone.

× Yes, I think bikes are really very important and popular in my country, it is more convenient when a way travelling to another city.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are really important and popular in my country because they are a convenient way to travel to another city.

The phrase when a way travelling is not grammatically complete or logically organized. The natural structure is a convenient way to travel. Use way + to-infinitive when describing a method of doing something, for example, a way to travel.