Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答基本切题，也提供了父母帮助和骑车上学的细节，但存在明显语法和表达问题。应将“when I were with a child”改为“when I was a child”，将“it is bought”改为过去时“it was bought”。最后一句不应使用问号或疑问语调，可以改为完整的结果句，例如“so I could go to school by myself”。建议按照“直接回答＋具体细节＋结果”的结构组织答案，并减少“Uh”等停顿词。

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My parents bought it for me and taught me how to ride it. As a result, I could ride to school by myself, which made me feel much more independent.

提案: 回答直接明确，并使用了中国共享单车和大学生骑车的具体例子，内容较有效。但“several brands of shared bikes”表达略生硬，可以说“several bike-sharing services”，而“ride shared bikes to classroom”应改为“ride shared bikes to class”或“to their classrooms”。建议使用连接词如“for example”连接观点和例子，并减少“umm”和“uh”等填充词。还可以补充骑车受欢迎的原因，例如方便、便宜和环保。

例: Yes, definitely. Bikes are very popular in China, especially shared bikes. For example, many students at my university use them to get to class because they are convenient, affordable, and better for the environment.

× Yes, I had a bike when I were with a child and it is bought by my parents.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, and it was bought by my parents.

这里描述的是童年时期的经历，所以动词应该使用过去时。“I were”应改为“I was”；“it is bought”也应改为过去时被动结构“it was bought”。

× Yes, I had a bike when I were with a child and it is bought by my parents.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, and it was bought by my parents.

表示“小时候”时，英语通常使用固定表达“as a child”或“when I was a child”。“with a child”表示“和一个孩子在一起”，不符合这里的意思。

× Uh, so I can go to school by myself?

✓ So I could go to school by myself.

前文讲述的是过去的经历，因此表示过去的能力或可能性时，应使用“could”，而不是现在时的“can”。此外，这句话是在说明结果，不需要使用问号。

× Actually, uh, in our university, many students choose to ride shared bikes to classroom.

✓ Actually, in our university, many students choose to ride shared bikes to the classroom.

“classroom”是可数名词单数，前面通常需要冠词。“the classroom”表示特定的教室。如果想表达“去上课”，也可以说“go to class”，此时不需要冠词。